Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well...this was a really wholesome little story this one...ahh its just so cute...and I just love how simple and very eight year oldish the writing is here...its just a nice little story to read here.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Happy New Year! Today, we were off school, and Daddy brought home a horde of fireworks. My favorite were the sparklers, since they lasted so long that you could run around the house and make it back without them running out. We burned a candle so that we could light the sparklers. We had to keep relighting it, since it burned out every five minutes randomly.
Oooh, well that sounds like the start like a pretty wholesome diary entry so far. It definitely seems like a nice and typical fun new years day celebration there with that candle acting quite strange there...oh dear...well it was probably just the wind there...so yeah all in all sounds like a very typical start to a diary entry probably by someone that's fairy young and well its just a really wholesome little passage to read here...let's see where this goes I suppose.
I couldn't say our driveway was clean afterwards. We had streak marks from the vivid smoke bombs, scattered here and there. A few fireworks littered the sidewalk, the ones that whizzed all over the place. A bag from the millions of snapdragons was right beside a driveway crack, and wax from the candle was collected around the grass. Tomorrow, my eighth birthday is occurring, and I will definitely see to your update!
Oooh...well my theory about this being from a really young person is definitely right if they're only eight years old. I'm no expert on writing children that age but this definitely feels like something a girl that age would write. And well the description of their garage there and how its a mess is also really nicely done. ALso that last line about the birthday being almost shoved in there as an afterthought without being given a proper separate paragraph also adds to it and makes it seem like something an eight year old would write which is another awesome detail to have. Hmm, well let's see how this birthday goes.
Oh my gosh! It was great! So, I invited two friends over, Alexandra and Kayla. We had the most fun ever, playing the whole time with American Girl dolls. My favorite was Saige, and Kayla liked Kit. Alexandra liked Rebecca. We talked about teachers and school and how it was going to end, and how we would act.
Oooh....well that certainly sounds like she had a lot of fun there...I'm loving the way that these diary entries are constructed so far, its very accurate for someone that age and its just suuper wholesome to read about a young girl just having a lot of fun celebrating her birthday with her friends...just the kind of story to leave you smiling after reading it, a rarity for YWS...xD
I had cheesecake for dinner, and we put whipped cream on it to see the taste. I got a Saige doll and book from Kayla, a book making kit from Alexandra, and a kitten from my mom and dad. I named it Pepper. My grandparents sent their best regards, and I hope you do too!
Hmm...well that's certainly a lovely ending to what must have been a wonderful day and this wholesome little story comes to an end then I see.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Well...this story definitely has the vibe of something that's come right out of the diary of a little girl here...and its just such a wholesome little story to read...and well honestly, that's about all I've gotta say here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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