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I really liked it.
It doesn't feel like a poem in terms of structure, grammatical correctness and such but It was violent with emotion. A lot of poetry I read feels like pretty words, good order but the emotions are either not there or veiled in a film of purple-prose.
I would say take this passion and redirect it into something with a little more structure, while still leaving that raw edge intact. Or get a blog to post this stuff in.
Anyways, keep feeling this angry, it makes for good writing.
xxooxx
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