it’s funny how in the movies
the sky seems to cry with the character
but the saddest thing
is that in real life
you’re the only one crying
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Hey there Kat here to review YET ANOTHER of your works. You are pretty talented with these short poems of yours .
Happy review day Team WHY?
So, tiny review for a tiny poem . I adore the irony here really I do. In fact yo could have made this even longer by elaborating how everyone else seems fine when you just literally feel like the world died . It seems to me that days are unusually sunny when I am crying, just average annoyingly sunny days :/ like I said in the last poem I personally feel that in short poems punctuation really takes a lot away from it . At least add a period please >.< I might be a little OCD about punctuation sorry. I totally understand .
I loved this one , really expressive and (again!) relate-able.
~Kat
Hello Lylas, xJ to the rescue!
A few things, first off, this is a nice and simplistic poem, I can respect that. However, you need to work on capitalizing and using punctuation because poetry, is not just typing what you feel, you also need to make it look good. So capitalize and punctuate. You need the comas in poetry because pauses are important. Without having a pause, it just looks like a run-on sentence without a period. Other than that, I like the simplicity of this poem. And I like the message. Nice work, but try to improve. ^.^
May your travels through space and time be merry.
-xJ
again, the way I punctuate and capitalize is my own person style, but thank you
Short but effective lines.
Well done and keep it up.
A concise and phenomenal demarcation in real and reel life.
But next time try to write something positive and motivating in minimum words possible.
Short but effective lines.
Well done and keep it up.
You have presented a concise and phenomenal demarcation in real and reel life. But next time try to write something positive and motivating in minimum words possible. An optimistic post always sticks in mind and help people. But anyways, good work to be shared
Keep writing. Stay blessed
This poem is nice but also rather depressing. I like how you were able to keep it short and still get your pint across, however I feel like it could be longer. I think you could go on with more verses about how the rain affects how people feel or what happens during the rain. It was written very well but the only problem is the shortness of it which might be why you haven't gotten any reviews or comments on it. I hope you keep writing.
the central idea of the poem is to keep it short and sweet. but thank you!