Young Writers Society

Hey! FlamingPhoenix here with a short review for you!

Okay lets start!

This was a really deep peace of work you have here. I've never been in love before, so the fact I'm feeling so down and heart broken right now really shows how much emotion you put into this.
The words you used were so touching, and so bitterly true! It was just amazing!

I also like the little bit of rhyming you did at the end.

The whole thing is that I don’t feel I belong to here anymore. I am in love with you, as I am in love with Shakespeare, as I am in love with the smell of old books, as I am in love with the fresh air in the early morn; they are all things that I can’t touch.

Hello,

This was a beautiful piece of writing and it breaks it your heart into tiny little pieces and makes you think hard when you are putting them back together. It was real and honest and though it was sad, I like the hope that radiates throughout the thing because it makes me want to hold on to that one chance of a silver lining that promises brighter skies.

" Do you know the difference between loving and liking so much?"

This line was so amazing and it actually renders you speechless and makes you think for a while.

"But it isn’t enough. Love was never enough."

This line was so sad and yet so powerful. It just makes you feel a lot of things.

"......about my love to you… because my love to you was everything."

This was the only part I thought you could change. Instead of 'my love to you', you can write 'my love for you'. It just reads better, but it is totally up to you.

Over all, this was amazing. Keep on the good work!

- RandomTalks

Hi! This piece broke me to the core. I hope that you are felling better now after pouring your feelings. This was a short piece but had all the potential to leave indelible impression on my mind of reader. The line which gave me a jerk is: " Even awesome things don't last until the end" These lines are so true.
Overall, it is a very well-written piece of work. All the best for your future works.
Keep Writing!
From: Bhavya

Hi, Delirium Nervosa here to leave a review for you.
I really enjoyed reading your letter! I was definitely able to resonate with the character and I feel many others will be able to as well. It is so openly heartbroken and yet shining through is this unbroken strength and belief that it all will get better eventually. Enjoy the good while it lasts. Don't take things for granted and certainly don't fall in love with someone for their potential. I am so glad I was able to read this wonderful piece of writing! I look forward to reading more of your work.

Delirium Nervosa

Hi
diphylleia,
Your piece of writing was wonderful and i was touched while reading so.
It seems that you have been heartbroken . Somebody you loved either has cheated you or rejected. I dont know exactly that what you were saying about but the sentences you used will surely make the reader cry...
It was very emotional. And yes ,I agree with you in the point You mentioned :

" Do you know the difference between loving and liking so much?"
This was the question that was always stuck in my mind. I really could not understand what was the difference between love and liking. But then after thinking a lot I came to the point.

Love is something which you can define as a feeling of care .You cant let something bad happen to your loved ones..
Liking is just a feeling of attraction and nothing else. The feeling which comes when You are attracted by someone's beauty,intelligence,character ,style,passion,body etc.

So ,I think I know whats the difference. I think I told a little much so please dont mind.


And yes Your writing piece was amazing!!
Keep writing !
FROM Sulagna

Hey, it's Shadeflame here for a review!

I think your style is great! Your letter was very personal, and it seemed that the person writing it was trying to move on. I really like the lines

But it isn’t enough. Love was never enough. Should it be there other things? I don’t know.