Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language and violence.
Ranforth fell back from the surprise of the blow and crashed into a cart carrying several bottles and cups of pills. They scattered to the floor with a loud clattering sound. Stavers didn't look to see if Ranforth got back up before lunging for the curtain that separated him from what had to be salvation. He got one step before Ranforth's hand darted out and caught him around the ankle, bringing him to the ground as well.
Ranforth scrabbled at his feet, desperately trying to get a hold on him and prevent his escape, but a well-aimed kick to the face stopped. him.
"Damn you!" snarled Ranforth.
Stavers didn't pause to hear what he had left to say. He heaved himself to his feet, using his bed as a lever and lunged again for the curtain, this time making his way through and out into a medbay. He quickly scanned the room, searching desperately for the door. Finding it, he lurched towards it. A laser bolt flashed past his ear and he glanced back to see Ranforth shakily aiming a silver-plated pistol at him and bleeding heavily from a cut above his left eye.
He redoubled his efforts, almost falling through the door as it slid open to his presence. Another two shots flew past Stavers' shoulder blades as he turned and darted down the hall, heading for the escape pod bay.
"You will die, goddamn it!" came another shout behind Stavers. He glanced behind again and saw Ranforth in hot pursuit. Turning his head back around, he could see the escape pod bay, barely a hundred yards away. He closed on it, quickly, but his wound prevented him from moving very speedily.
75 yards.
50 yards.
25.
10.
Suddenly, Stavers cried out in pain and fell to the ground, rolling into a stack of boxes that all collapsed on him. He lay there for a moment, completely covered until he felt a pair of hands grip him under his armpits and hoist him out of the boxes. They brushed against his shoulder and he shouted again as a sudden wave of pain coursed through him again. Evidently, one of Ranforth's shots had hit.
"So help me, God, I will kill you here and now."
Stavers looked up into the sneering face of Ranforth and felt the muzzle of the pistol pressed into his stomach. Looking around, he noticed a small crowd beginning to gather.
"Or I would if I didn't need to find out what you know."
Stavers said nothing, aware that his flight had failed.
"Now, you're going to come quietly this time," said Ranforth, "Or you'll wish that sniper's aim had been less faithful."
"You forget one thing, sir," said Stavers.
"And what's that, you traitorous bastard?"
"Gutshots don't kill anymore." And with that, he grabbed for the gun.
Ranforth pulled the trigger. Stavers inhaled sharply as the pain ripped through his body again. But, he weathered it and wrenched the gun away from Ranforth. He held one hand to his stomach as the other pointed the gun at Ranforth. Ranforth held his hands up, almost mockingly.
"Fine then, son. Leave. But, don't think that we won't find you."
Stavers backed up slowly. He stopped at the launch console for the nearest pod. He glanced away momentarily to enter a code the opened the door. It whirred open and he stepped into the pod.
"Give me a five-minute head-start," said Stavers, as he slapped the launch button. The hydraulic door slammed shut and the pod jettisoned from the ship.
SIX HOURS LATER
Ed sat at one of the tables in Molon Labe's common area, playing a round of poker with Dave. His distinctive half empty glass of alcohol rested on the table as well.
"You're gonna drink yourself to death, you know that?" said Dave.
"You're one to talk," responded Ed, gesturing at the cigarette in Dave's mouth and the two butts still smoldering in a depression carved into the table.
"There's a difference there, Ed."
"What's that?"
"Well, you see-" Dave started to launch into what promised to be a long-winded explanation but was quickly cut off by a loud beeping sound from the cockpit. Dave grinned a very wide grin. "Saved by the proximity alarm."
"Let's just check it out, alright?" asked Ed.
The two of them walked to the cockpit, Dave dropping into the pilot's seat and Ed into the copilot's.
"Any idea where it might be?" asked Ed.
"Oh, I have an inkling."
"Really? Where?"
"Oh, somewhere about there," said Dave, pointing out the windscreen to a dot in space dead ahead of Molon Labe. Three seconds later that dot turned out to be a small cylinder of metal and pressure-resistant glass that did not react well to being plowed into at near-light speed.
"Shit!" shouted Ed as he was slammed forward into the windscreen (and not for the first time). "We gotta get some goddamn seatbelts."
Dave looked at him sideways, a tiny bit of blood trickling from his forehead.
"What? And ruin this fun? I know I always enjoy head trauma during parking."
"You shut up. You ask me, we should figure out what that thing is and where it went," said Ed.
"Well, where is easy enough," responded Dave. "My detailed sensor readings here indicate that that frozen chunk of metal in the windscreen would be the object of our interest."
"If the windscreen is broken, how are we not dead yet?"
"Look like an escape pod of some sort. Those are equipped with emergency supplies of food and water. We must've hit that, punctured it, and hit the cracks before freezing. 'Course, it's gonna sublimate off soon, so we should probably try to fix that somehow."
"Or we die fast yet horrible deaths," said Ed.
"Yes."
"And we only have two spacesuits."
"Yes."
"That only fit you and me."
"Yes."
"And we sold most of our supplies on Hellhole"
"Yes."
"And we're wasting our time doing this 'statement, yes' shit."
"Yes."
"So we're going to live?"
"No"
*****
Dave's speculation seemed to be a bit of an exaggeration. When the two of them stepped out of Molon Labe's airlock and maneuvered to where she connected with the flotsam, they found that the problem could be solved comparatively easily.
Each compartment in Molon Labe could be sealed off and depressurized for emergency repairs just such as this. Ed ordered Kizzvell to do just this. The moment Kizzvell told him it was clear, Ed and Dave spread a thick, extremely adhesive substance over the area and began cutting away the slim metal pole that connected Molon Labe to the space junk.
Just before Molon Labe was freed, Ed noticed something on the pole. In the light of his spacesuit's flashlight, he could see tiny shadows being cast by engraving on the pole. He leaned in closer to read it. The letters and numbers before him spelled out "TYU-COMM-ARRY-GEN8 ESCPOD-9 UFP PRISON HULK "INTIMIDATION"
"Dave?" he said over his comms.
"Whatcha need boss?" came the reply.
"This isn't just chance garbage. This is a Federation escape pod."
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Hi cidrianwritersguild,

Mailice here with a short review!
Phew, I think it's been a while since I read Parts 1 and 2, and I can only loosely remember everything. Still, let's start with the review:
I remember again between the conversation with Ranforth and Stavers and then how it turned out with Stavers that it's weird that he's the only one who survived. So slowly it all makes sense how the escape of Stavers leads to Dave and co. I think it was quite interesting to see how the escape unfolded, but also thought that it didn't go straight into "suspense", but more in the direction of action, where as a reader you kind of knew that Stavers would survive - somehow. I think if you flesh out the escape scene a bit, you can certainly create a far more suspenseful moment.
I liked the dialogue between the two. You could clearly see that Ranforth is obsessed with the idea of killing Stavers because he is a traitor, and I think you portrayed that well here in the chapter. I especially liked how he tried to plead with God several times to offer him help. I am also convinced that his last threat was not an empty one, but that there will still be a confrontation.
The transition to Dave and co. was a bit too close. I found the six hours later a bit odd as a transition, as it felt weird, and you also got a change of perspective, which left you as a reader confused at the beginning as to who was now narrating from which perspective. On the other hand, I welcome this development and how they were interrupted playing a card game.
In general, I found it a well-written chapter. I liked the plot development and how it comes together. Your dialogue is funny and set up well for the situation and also think your seamless transition from the last part here was also very good. The fact that it's now being delivered with a cliffhanger again I think is very great and I'm excited to see how this confrontation will go.
Other points that caught my eye:
One full stop too many here.
A little spelling mistake here.
Have fun writing!
Mailice
Hey there! Plume here, with a review!
I was so excited to see another part of Ripples in Space out, and I was not let down! I really enjoyed reading the next part of the story, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it from here!
One thing I enjoyed was your use of details to really build the scene. I think some great examples of this was when Ranforth crashed into the pill cart; I could totally hear all of those pills clattering to the ground like you described them. I also liked the idea of Ed and Dave playing poker and lecturing each other about the other's vices; that seemed very in character for them. I think if you incorporated some card dialogue in there (i. e. them commenting on what's in the game) you could liven the scene even more. But yeah, I really enjoyed the naturalistic parts of your scenes and how naturally they flowed/how the details all seemed to fit in.
Specifics
Tiny thing here: don't think you meant to put a period after stopped.
I thought that this sentence might flow better if you put another comma after "covered."
I feel like you could combine these two sentences into one and put a comma before "but" rather than after it.
Another small thing: you forgot a punctuation mark after no. Also, love that little banter bit between Ed and Dave. Really nice work there.
Since "boss" is a form of address, you need a comma after "need." Also, very interesting that the garbage was part of a Federation escape pod... was it the same one that Stavers used to escape?? If it was, what does that mean for the fate of Stavers now?? I can't wait for the next part!!
Overall: nice job! I'm super curious to see if Stavers is okay and if he'll interact with Ed and Dave at all and help take Ranforth down. So excited for the next part, but no pressure, of course! Until next time!