Young Writers Society

Hello there BlueRaven!!

This is Eros here to review this beautiful song!

Ahhh! It was just soo beautiful! I liked the meaning of it. The lyrics were superb. It is a very emotional song, that just broke my heart. It was very touchy and has loooot of emotions in it.
The guy/girl in the poem wants love. S/He longs for a warm heart who can understand him/her, who can hug him/her in the intense pain and sufferings he/she is suffering from.

Trying to hurt their own self, the narrator makes an attempt to make a cut with the blade. Everyone else stops her/him from doing so. But he/she doesn't listen. The cold blood oozing through the cut makes the narrator cry even more and that empties their heart... The narrator goes on saying, that "I wanna be hugged and loved..." and that, "Can anyone save me now?"
By saying, "Save me now", he/she wanna convey that "Can anyone save me from my suffering and pains and sadness by just one kiss and a hug and by loving me?"

It was a GREAT piece!
Loved it very much!

Keep writing...
Never cease...
Because we all love to keep reading such beautiful works like this one!!
Have a great day/night!

New favorite relatable post on the ENTIRE website. I can't even begin to explain how this all comes back to me. If you check out the "About" page on my profile then I think you'll understand. But wow. I command and applaud you for that.

I think I saw a "their" instead of "they're" in the fourth paragraph, but other than that I didnt notice any other typos.

Every single stanza was like: wow...my work is that of a baloney pony compared to this! I am a chicken fried f**k (sorry!) when seeing this and other work. You've done a spectacular job!!

I admit that this could also be a sad but threatening rap, with some lines whispered, others growing louder and louder in volume and strength... And then the breath of a sigh turns over to the next stanza. Wow. I wish I could hear this as a performed song, like one of those lyric videos.

Well I've really got to get ready for my church, so I'll be around later! Congratulations!! This is amazing, simply amazing!!!!!!!



~ chicken fried f**k xD

This is a song?!
Now I can explain to myself the smoothness and the great flow in this work.Very good job.The tittle of the song is awesome and it is amazing, that you could think of such good lyrics.I can not really relate to this song, but I am sure many can.Maybe the capitalization is my only problem with this work.But like this, it is still okay.

I love these song lyrics blueRaven2239! I can relate this to some of my friends, they feel the same way. I was the only one that actually did not think they were wierd, they are actually some of my best friends.

Ok, back on topic.

I love the lyrics, they are a total message to those who think some people are wierd.
I like the paragraph 4, it is what everybody says to those who do cut, but it is hard to stop. Some people are addicted to the pain, and others use that as their fall to when they are emotionally hurt.
I wish you will keep writing and making a difference.


~PoeticCowboy