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My Best Friend

by bloodstring


I have a friend,

who is always there for me.

We always make plans,

and share what we need.

We like to play together,

ever since we were young.

Like birds of the same feather,

flying to and fro with fun.


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Tue May 17, 2016 9:35 am
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BookOholic22 wrote a review...



hey bloodstring, bookoholic22 here for a review.
your poem was very fragile piece, as it had those emotions in words.
you could have made it more powerful by adding some punctuation's and making it this way:

I have a friend, who is always there for me.
We always make plans, and share what we need.
We like to play together, ever since we were young
like birds of the same feather, flying to and fro with fun.

i hope my review helped you. Though it is not necessary for you to stick by my review. It is your work, so the decision depends on you.
Really this work was nicely worded.
keep writing! waiting for more from you..
~bookoholic22




bloodstring says...


It really helped...thanks heaps!!



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Tue May 17, 2016 9:24 am
RippleGylf wrote a review...



I really liked this poem. Beautifully short, in my opinion. There are some formatting issues, but that's probably due to technical difficulties, I'm guessing. I assume the desired form of the poem was this:

I have a friend
Who is always there for me
We always make plans
And share what we need
We like to play together
Ever since we were young
Like birds of the same feather
Flying to and fro with fun

The rhyme is very skillfully done, and doesn't feel forced. The last two lines are probably my favorite. Overall, a wonderfully written poem. :D




bloodstring says...


You're right! It was a tech. problem;I don't even know how it came to be like that. And thanks for the review...



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Tue May 17, 2016 7:58 am
zsmith wrote a review...



Hey there, zsmith here to review

I liked this piece because it was short and sweet. It was quite an enjoyable read and seemed to describe the perfect friendship. I also like that it actually rhymed and didn't sound forced; that is a lost art in today's poetry, so well done for that. I don't really have any constructive criticism to give because it felt just right. I don't think you need to add any more to it.

Good work and keep writing

-Zsmith




bloodstring says...


OMG! THANK YOU SO MUCH



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Tue May 17, 2016 6:52 am
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Lemons says...



Hi,

You should add more.

Lemons




bloodstring says...


thanks




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