I have a friend,
who is always there for me.
We always make plans,
and share what we need.
We like to play together,
ever since we were young.
Like birds of the same feather,
flying to and fro with fun.
hey bloodstring, bookoholic22 here for a review.your poem was very fragile piece, as it had those emotions in words.you could have made it more powerful by adding some punctuation's and making it this way:
I have a friend, who is always there for me.We always make plans, and share what we need.We like to play together, ever since we were younglike birds of the same feather, flying to and fro with fun.
I really liked this poem. Beautifully short, in my opinion. There are some formatting issues, but that's probably due to technical difficulties, I'm guessing. I assume the desired form of the poem was this:
I have a friendWho is always there for meWe always make plansAnd share what we needWe like to play togetherEver since we were youngLike birds of the same featherFlying to and fro with fun
Hey there, zsmith here to reviewI liked this piece because it was short and sweet. It was quite an enjoyable read and seemed to describe the perfect friendship. I also like that it actually rhymed and didn't sound forced; that is a lost art in today's poetry, so well done for that. I don't really have any constructive criticism to give because it felt just right. I don't think you need to add any more to it. Good work and keep writing-Zsmith
Hi,You should add more.Lemons
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