Hi, this is ZeldaIsShiek here to save the Witches from a crushing defeat at the hands of the Werewolves! Not that that could happen! Haha! Anyway, I'm here to review your work and leave you with some constructive criticism. Without any further adue, let's begin!
I really liked the message behind this poem and I feel that you are a very good poet and writer in general. I love the message behind this poem, and some of the in-story references to it being a poem are pretty sly and really bring the message into the real, tangible world, which is something I definitely appreciate in a good poem.
I really liked the message of this poem that is to be a good person and help those in need, regardless of how much you really care. That is why the poet asks everyone if they really lie in bed at night, kept awake by the true horrors of poverty that everyone seems to mention, but no one really seems to understand or care about those who are poor. That is why the last line is cool to me. If this were someone talking, there would not be a strikethrough through the 'it' in the last sentence. Could this be a poem written by someone in the poem itself to express their care for poor citizens?
That's all for today, and never stop writing!
-ZeldaIsShiek
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