I have a friend,
who is always there for me.
We always make plans,
and share what we need.
We like to play together,
ever since we were young.
Like birds of the same feather,
flying to and fro with fun.
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hey bloodstring, bookoholic22 here for a review.
your poem was very fragile piece, as it had those emotions in words.
you could have made it more powerful by adding some punctuation's and making it this way:
i hope my review helped you. Though it is not necessary for you to stick by my review. It is your work, so the decision depends on you.
Really this work was nicely worded.
keep writing! waiting for more from you..
~bookoholic22
It really helped...thanks heaps!!
I really liked this poem. Beautifully short, in my opinion. There are some formatting issues, but that's probably due to technical difficulties, I'm guessing. I assume the desired form of the poem was this:
The rhyme is very skillfully done, and doesn't feel forced. The last two lines are probably my favorite. Overall, a wonderfully written poem.
You're right! It was a tech. problem;I don't even know how it came to be like that. And thanks for the review...
Hey there, zsmith here to review
I liked this piece because it was short and sweet. It was quite an enjoyable read and seemed to describe the perfect friendship. I also like that it actually rhymed and didn't sound forced; that is a lost art in today's poetry, so well done for that. I don't really have any constructive criticism to give because it felt just right. I don't think you need to add any more to it.
Good work and keep writing
-Zsmith
OMG! THANK YOU SO MUCH
Hi,
You should add more.
Lemons
thanks