Hello!! I'm here to leave a review.
I would like to start by complimenting the talent you displayed in writing this poem. You might notice most of this review is going to be praise and maybe some light suggestions, that would be why.
As far as specific things I enjoyed there are many. For one your use of comparisons is consistent and extremely well thought out. I also loved the way you portrayed the eagerness the daughter had for a relationship throughout the entire poem, showing the feelings weren't childish or immature. You also did a good job tying the ending to the beginning stanzas, especially because the poem is on the longer side. The repetition also helped with the flow and overall the prom is gorgeous when spoken aloud.
My light a suggestion would be to play with the line and stanza breaks on some of the more "shocking" or "harsh truth" statements. For example the lines "I don't want that though" (stanza and "He left for London the next day"(stanza 5) could in my opinion, be there own stanzas all together. They are both revealing and vulnerable lines as well as shocking and disappointing, which should be highlighted.
As I said I loved the poem and enjoyed reviewing it. Hope I helped at all.
Points: 674
Reviews: 16
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