Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.
My nightmares happened in the day,
so I called them day mares.
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Children always believed,
monsters lived everywhere.
Under the bed,
in the closet,
in the dark.
I was eight when I encountered my first.
By then mommy told me,
that a special poison overtook daddy.
Then,
the monster took his skin.
Now,
I hide under the bed.
The monster never lived there.
Nightmares make illusions of pain,
day mares make them reality.
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Outside the house
it’s almost as if a great war has begun.
All the sounds compose a chorus,
befitting the backgrounds of battle.
Screams of pain
ella, run away, i’ll handle this
Screams of wrath
lizzie, you've been a bad girl, now the brat pays
Screams of beseeching
i was going to I swear, leave her alone
Screams of sadism
you know what happens when you fight back
Screams of torment
please stop
I can only cover my ears,
then wait for the bombing to end.
not all day mares have frightening features,
some are masters at camouflage
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My hand is gripped in the monster’s claws.
Yet his pearly white fangs form a megawatt smile;
donning a mask of false goodness.
All of his work friends call him lucky.
you have a beautiful daughter, johnny
and an even more beautiful wife.
golly, i wish i was you.
His arm around mommy
is an ironclad leash,
keeping her close,
ready to harshly tug if she strays.
He professes his adoration of us,
just like daddy used to.
they are my everything.
i love them with all of my heart.
Behind closed doors,
day mares lurk and wait to be tamed.
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The beast sleeps only when sated.
Tongues and teeth.
His calming requires an invasion of mommy’s mouth.
I watched his hands grip her throat in a vice.
Tonight, she won’t sing me to sleep.
Tonight, she won’t tuck me in bed.
Her legs will be covered in bruises,
her insides are abrupt with blood,
her voice, hoarse and rough.
I still smell her sweat and tears.
I still hear his monstrous growls.
Humans can mutate into day mares,
inner monster released from it’s cage.
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The house is cold.
The floor is painted scarlet.
Mommy stands before me,
mouth agape in horror.
The monster’s weapon of choice,
pointed directly at his corpse.
A hollow hole impales his temple.
The fluids splattered on my clothes.
She came running when she heard the bang.
look mommy, i saved us.
We cower in the light of our day mares
but we forget we once loved the human inside.
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Her body is draped across the monster’s.
Her shoulders shook harder than buildings during earthquakes.
Anguished shrieks cloud the room,
colors of conflicted relief and grief.
For once,
her lips press to his in her own freedom.
what have you done
i rescued you mommy, i defeated the monster
he was still your father and the husband i love
but mommy
have you no regret, you’ve become a monster
The darkness and light of a day mare stares into your soul,
If we don’t look away fast enough, that day mare becomes us.
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The details ,details ,details, details ..... beautifully written !
Thank you so so much! Is it worth a like? Anyone I should edit or change?
Hi aooborromeo! Anne here for a review!!
ButI loved this poem. The structure was so unique and to-the-point. Every word used was so refreshing!! The poem itself very appealing.
1st stanza
The stanza was pure beauty. It expressed the innocence of a child so well. Children usually believe what their parents tell them- here too that was just the case. Further, when you mentioned the age, it made it even more enjoyable, because the mindset also seems to match an 8-year old. One thing that was uncanny though was this...
I will be lying if I say I understood this.
2nd stanza
The analogy of a war to express screams of so many variations was so apt. Also in a sense that as in a war, here too the narrator is under the constant fear of being attacked, ie, being abused or yelled at by the monster. That is, of course, my interpretation. The structure of this particular stanza was awesome.
3rd stanza
The expression- 'megawatt smile'. Ha! I can totally visualise the scenario. Gives me the feel of the transformed werewolf. And claws just adds flavor to my imagination.
4th stanza
Oh My Gosh! Is that marital rape?! The description was spine-rattling! And add on to that, the fact that a child has to see all of this. It's pathetic, cruel and definitely monstrous. I also liked the representation of innocence again, something which I can totally relate to. Which was the mention of these lines.
These sound trivial things now, but it mattered a lot when we were kids. I remember once, there was a death in our family while my mother was telling us a story. So she had to go suddenly and then all four cousins started to cry, not because of the death (we were too young to understand death anyway) but because there was no one to tell us a story anymore.
But coming back, I loved these lines also because of the contrast they were- the thought of a child vs the god-knows-what's-going-in-his-head thoughts of a monster. Amazing!
5th stanza
As I mentioned earlier, at 5 -year old, I was too young to understand the horrors of death. Did this child understand it completely? Whether yes or no, s/he did understand it to some extent. The line' look mommy, I saved us' was so refreshing!! The use of mommy with saving is great. A child hero!! A loving daughter/son!! But things don't always go the way we want them to ,right?
6th stanza
And they didn't !! I've got nothing to say here.
These lines, ah! They literally left me speechless.
This poem is great!! If it's based on your personal experience, I hope tings are better for you now! I can't praise this poem enough!! Great job! I'm eager to read more from you!!
Thank you so so much! No this wasn't based on personal experience, but I did go to therapy with a boy who witnessed these things. I thought about him when writing this.
I like to think there's a special place in hell for those who abuse their spouses and children...
Thanks for the review!!!!
Oh! Then I do hope things are better for him now.
Anytime <3
That's such a sweet thought!!
This was actually really good! Especially if you finished it in like 10 minutes. I never personally went through any trauma or abuse ever, but I think even from my POV you give a great understanding that is not always seen. I also think the way you break up the stanzas is really cool! Great Job! Only bit of advice I would give is just to make sure words flow smoothly, I think you were really good for the most part but that is all I could say because I am not too experienced... But working on flow can only make a poem better from what I know! Good job!
Thanks for the review! I really appreciate the advice. My biggest concern with all of my poetry especially this one is rhythm and flow. I still need to finish editing but I posted it to get advice on how to fix it.
Thanks for the review! I really appreciate the advice. My biggest concern with all of my poetry especially this one is rhythm and flow. I still need to finish editing but I posted it to get advice on how to fix it.