Young Writers Society

Hats off to your amazing work.
I Really loved it. Your a talented person.
With more hard work and all you can do much better.
In the last verse .. i felt it needed more power cause that part seemed dull and needed much more you know a thing which attracts people.
And i wonder which type of song would you keep this as
Rock, pop , slow ..
Anwys good work
KEEP GOING
PS - I LOVED THIS LINES
A chemical imbalance
Twisted and turned
Beware, you may be next.

Hello, I thought this work of lyrics was pretty, but I feel like it could have been a bit better. To start, I wish the verses were longer to give more depth to the lyrics and idea behind them. Though, I could see this being a rock song, and I could see it being very successful. Secondly, I wish the chorus had more to it, so that it could shed more light on the idea of the lyrics. Lastly, I wish the idea of the lyrics as a whole was a bit more clear, though I did get it, I just wish it was more out there. I hope you keep writing! - Hsarver