Hi WishIHadASword,
Mailice here for a third time to give a review! 
I can only repeat what I wrote in the previous parts: very good distinction between Amanda and Blake. You keep the writing style constant, you just add smileys to Amanda and write more about the outside world in her text than Blake. Also, her sentence structure is very different, which I like (and it helps to read the letter much faster). She writes as if she's talking, as if she's constantly in a rush, completely frantic, as if a thousand things are coming into her head that she needs to write down to tell Blake.
I could almost quote sentence after sentence here to give a brief comment, but that would drag out the review. What stands out the most for me are the way Amanda writes and inserts expressions that are actually said than written. The insertion of multiple punctuation marks (like question marks) is very good and the way she writes about things and makes a brief comment herself. Keep this up!
One criticism from the first chapter is that maybe you could put the date and address in the letters to come. This might be just a tiny little thing, but it would definitely add the finishing touches to the letters!
Keep this style going. The letters are well written, and I don't think you need to expand on them much to give more content.
[quote] (P.S- I'm SO in for the junk food thing). [quote]
So junk food for Blake after all? (I don't think you'd have to put brackets in a P.S. since it´s already some sort of additional comment.)
Still have fun with the writing!
Mailice.
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