Hey, WanderingCloud! VegasLights here to give you a review!
I believe your poem is wonderful and needs no fixes. I love the descriptive words that you used. They gave me beautiful imagery, and I really enjoyed that. For the flow, I believe all is well and I don't see any issues. The structure of your poem works well with the flow. I believe that is why everything fits together so great. The extra limerick that you gave us was funny. But, I don't think you need to include that with the actual poem itself. If I were you, I would put it on a different post.
Sadly, all reviews must come to an end and here is the end of this one. I thank you for your time and I hope you have a great day!
~Keep Writing!~
VegasLights
(Previously Steam1244)
Points: 4
Reviews: 80
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