Hi Vaibhav, welcome to YWS!
I hope you're enjoying the site so far
I know you've disagreed with LittleLee below on the classification of this, but generally when people post art on this site it's more actual images. That's of course not to say that writing isn't a form of art! It's more to help organise the site, and also so you get more reviews as people often look to review specific sections. It's an easy fix though, just PM a mod and they can move it for you!
I also see most of the grammar issues and spelling have been pointed out below so I'll skip those for now, especially as they can be fixed quickly. I'd be happy to go through it again once you've had a chance to edit though, so just drop me a message if you want me to have a quick check for any errors you might miss!
It had been raining incessantly for hours. It was seven in the evening and it was already dark as if the sun never rose and the clouds never gave way for the silver lining to appear across the sky. Within this darkness, there were quite a number of faces the stood under the shade, waiting, dull and gloomy, not only for the rains to end but also for the inevitable to be passed. Never had there been more harmony between nature and humans, given the years of feud that both had witnesses.
I really like the imagery you're trying to convey here. I'm a sucker for descriptions of weather and I love when a piece starts that way - it really sets the scene for me! Just watch where you've got some long run on sentences as it disrupts the flow. I've highlighted the offending section here. You do this a couple more times throughout, so just have a check through.
The door was opened with a thud and Jonathan was gasping for air due to continuous running. “Carl was convicted due to lack of evidence!” And as he uttered these words, a wave of shock travelled across the room. The most awaited judgement was passed and seemingly disappointed many awaiters. As he looked around the room, Jonathan can only see disappointed faces except one and within second he knew why. Veronica was a junior lawyer at their firm and she had decided to move from that city following certain difficulties during past few months. As Johnathan approached, she picked up the box which contained all her belongings. There was a blank expression that she had when she saw him
There's a lot happening in this paragraph, could you break it up a bit? Also, awaiters is not a word
In her case the landlord refused to allow her to live in the house because she failed show the legal documents related to the house following death of her husband. Her case was that their house was still in their duration of contract and landlord cannot ask her to leave the house.
You rush through a lot of the ending here, and I don't think it does your beginning justice. Take a bit of time and think about where you want this to go, and try extending the end. It's all of a sudden too fast and needs slowing down.
I think this needs a little bit of work, especially at the end. But I'm happy to reread whatever you edit.
Hope some of these comments have been helpful for you!
Icy
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