Hello!
Stegosaurus here for a review!
This poem has the perfect humor that few can actually try to do. It seems to be the kind that you would read when you are sad or need something to make you laugh. This would be in my line of humor, which is hard to grasp and understanding. As I am reading, I can imagine most of the imagery you provided. The characters you have seemed to be like a normal couple, however, I am confused as to what had happened to poor Harry. All I could think is he was shot in the head by his wife, who doesn't remember shooting him in the head. However, I could be wrong.
Your rhyming pattern for this poem seems a little weak. It doesn't have that feel for moving it along-- just like a road needing paved. The spacing for the stanzas seems a bit off (shift + enter, can fix this and make it perfectly easy stanzas) also the main theme for this poem is kinda off and on. From what I understand, some poems don't have a theme and just have a rhyme-- like free-style (which I think this poem is?).
She wept for 5 days straight,
Instead of writing 5, write five since it could disrupt the pattern for words.
Overall, this was a lovely and humorous poem. I hope to read more of your work in the near future.
If you like me to go over anything, let me know!
Steggy
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