I feel the emotion wrecking through this person. Like it seems that it is so painful, but she/he seems to be ok. That just makes me happy when she/he is like don't make big promises just give me what youcan which happens to be just tonight. I love the fact that the character is actually very realistic and not just like promise me everything, even though I know it probably would not work out and I am going to probably be emotionally damaged. The character doesn't have high expectations and that just makes my brain want to dig more information than is actually there dear god, Am I turning into an English teacher? (I'm just kidding that is totally an English teacher thing to do though). Grammatically I think your poem is good, but most poems do not have the one sentence stanzas, but I also feel like it just adds to the drama and emotion behind the poem. And then I look back and read like twice more I just realized in your third stanza it's not parallel be cause the fourth line you have a capital letter, so I would make that a different stanza or I think add a period before-hand or just do not you do you boo. Your poem was amazing and just keep up the amazing work.
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