Dedicated to Josh, who is indisputably one of the coolest guys I've ever met.
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Patterns, within patterns, within patterns, within patterns.
Like a wave, a transfer of energy, it comes and goes, leaving no trace yet
simultaneously making a lasting impression.
Kindness, within kindness, within kindness, within kindness,
My name is Sunshine. I am the kiss of God that touches your forehead
lightly and fills you with peaceful happiness. I am the taste of
cherry lemonade and the feeling of warm grass beneath your feet; the
scent of flowers on the distant summer breeze and the warm feeling in
your heart when you close your eyes and look up at me. I am given to
you to show you what joy is: a warm, beautiful summer day.
My name is Summer Wind, and I am the Lord smoothing back your hair when
your face is flushed and hot. I stir the corn and rustle the leaves.
I am the happy shiver down your spine when you feel anticipation and
the scent of sunshine. I am the color warm and the sound of laughter.
I show you the quiet strength that is the source of patience.
My name is Giggles, and I am the feeling of ecstasy that bubbles up
inside of you when you see all that is good and beautiful in this
world. I am the touch of a cool stream running over your feet, and
the sound of butterfly wings beating against the wind. I am the scent
of lavender vanilla, the taste of the color yellow. I am given to you
to remind you that there is always good in this world for those who
know how to look for it.
I am Smile, I am the love that you share with the people around you. I
am the color yellow, the sound of giggles, the scent of sunshine, the
taste of cherry lemonade. I am the texture of the color blue and the
sight of love. I am not a gift for you; rather, I am the gift that
you give to the people around you in response to what you have been
given. I am given from you to the people around you, who in turn
share me with the people around them in a ripple of joy spreading out
to encompass the world.
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Hey there! Bitter here to give you a review let's get started!!!
To be honest, this poem is kind of intimidating!
The tiny font that you used, whether intention or not, adds a little bit of density to the poem that you already had. I can see why you used it, it does seem to add to the effect of the poem (it seems to be typewriter font). But it sometimes scares off readers. However, if a reader is scared by tiny font, they should not be on this site. Therefore, you may or may not want to consider changing the font.
I am split down the middle in the respect of whether I love or hate the format of this poem. I love that the paragraph stanzas add coherence and collect the ideas of that section under one idea, but it also somewhat separates each paragraph from the next, which can be both a good and bad thing, depending on the intention.
I like your strong metaphors and similies strewn throughout this peice. It's powerful imagery and you have a gift for writing.
Overall, 7.5 out of 10. Great work! Never quit writing!!
BittterRosemary
Ok ,rikki here for a small review.
I hope Josh is someone you love and most affectionate to you.
Coming back initially I thought it to something about Ripples only as the name suggests. But the way you have personified four different entities brings in a whole new dimension to the writing. Moreover this is written in some other font style and seems good.
Sunshine,Summer wind,Giggles and Smile are the four leading characters of your story and you described them well and neatly attributed a few qualities to each with is a good descriptive thing done on your part.
I like to quote them a few things about each that I admired.
"My name is Sunshine. I am the kiss of God that touches your forehead
lightly and fills you with peaceful happiness. "
"My name is Summer Wind, and I am the Lord smoothing back your hair when
your face is flushed and hot."
"My name is Giggles, and I am the feeling of ecstasy that bubbles up
inside of you when you see all that is good and beautiful in this
world."
"I am Smile, I am the love that you share with the people around you. I
am the color yellow, the sound of giggles, the scent of sunshine, the
taste of cherry lemonade."
Anyways it was a nice read.
Keep writing.
ATB.
Thanks, Rikki! Yeah, Josh is a good friend of mine.
I'm glad you liked it! I try to make things as interesting to read as possible, it's nice to know I'm succeeding.
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