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Chapter 11 - Academy Year 2 - Opportunity ; Chapter 12 - Academy Year 2 - Void Magic

Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language, violence, and mature content.

Chapter 11 – Academy Year 2 – Opportunity

I wake up, open my eyes, and stare at the ceiling with my limbs fully stretched out on my bed. As I think back to the moment I completed my practical test, I smile, slowly melting into a grin.

"Kai, that was awesome! What didja do?!" Hiro exclaimed and jumped out of his seat. Water drops resounded as they fell from Hiro and splashed on the ground. Luna and Sitos mouths' were widened as water slid down their hair. Everyone had similar expressions across the room. Shivers of excitement coursed throughout my body.

Everyone's amazed…at me! I turned to Hiro and responded, "Well you know, I sent out my Mana and set it all to activate automatically after a few seconds."

Hiro twisted one side of his lips upward while cocking an eyebrow. "Umm…what?"

"Ahem," Moria interjects. "I can explain what just happened… You see, Kai gave the Mana instructions before he released it out of his body… First, he probably gathered the rich Mana from his body and moved it to his arm. Then, he assigned instructions to the Mana beginning with the calculations of the path required to reach the magical items. Since we could not see the Mana leaving Kai's body, it must mean that he released the inactive form of Mana and put separate instructions that activated the Mana. As he just said, it activated after a few seconds after reaching the programmed destination.

"What I did not mention before is that after this magical item takes in Mana, an item inside it called a Glim gives the Mana additional instructions before the Mana reaches the magic-producing Water Crystal. They are usually made so that the produced magic is more powerful with higher quality Mana or quantity. I am slightly confused as to why the water balls were so huge when Kai activated the device…"

Moria walked to the wall he created, put his hand on the wall. Moments later, the wall shrunk down to nothing. The two magical devices were slightly distorted in appearance. Moria put his hands on the devices. "Ah, I see… They must have malfunctioned and produced an abnormal outcome…"

"Hmm… Yes, you see when I tested this device yesterday with Rich Mana, it was not nearly as powerful as what Kai demonstrated… I am really not sure what exactly happened, but I am going to have to replace these before the next group takes the test," Moria announced as he started to walk up the steps while carrying the two broken devices.

The silence was broken by Hiro when he said, "Kai, ya bastard… I always thought it was strange we never witnessed ya trainin' your Mana… What kinda secret trainin' have ya been doin'?!"

"I am interested in that too," Sitos said with unwavering eyes.

Hmm? He doesn't seem as surprised as Hiro. As expected of Sitos, he already adjusted to the situation… What do I tell them… I can't reveal either the book or my Mana… I think before replying, "Well… Emdos trained me since I was six up until last year when I came to the Academy…"

"What?! So you have five years of experience ahead of us?! That's not fair! I wish I had someone to teach me when I was six…" Hiro exclaimed and pouted as he crossed his arms.

"I would not say that, Hiro. There is a reason why the Academy starts when you are 11. It is mainly because prior to age 11, manipulating Mana can be deadly to the user," Sitos explains. “I heard many talented kids have thrown away their potential by trying to test their capabilities too soon."

"Oh…" Hiro spoke quietly after relaxing his facial expressions and arms. "But whatabout Kai, Sitos?"

"I am wondering about that too. Who is this Emdos person? Was he trying to kill you?"

I pursed my lips getting ready to talk. I probably shouldn't tell them that I didn't know any of this at the time…

"He wasn't trying to kill me! He said that I'm special so that I wouldn't die. I trained under his supervision, and he had a secret medicine just in case!" I exclaimed confidently.

"You did say something like that on the first day…but how did he know you were special? You did not seem to know what the Mana measuring device was on the first day, so I doubt that he ever used one on you. It sounds like suicide to me that you trained your Mana when your Mana capacity grades are so low."

"Also, why didja keep that ya can use Rich Mana a secret?!" Hiro immediately asked.

"Uh…well…that's…"

"Tell us, Kai!" I opened my mouth, but I couldn’t think of something to say.

A moment later, Drugo put his hand on Hiro's shoulder and said, "Hiroster, calm down. I'm sure Kaister has his reasons for all of this… We don't need to interrogate him on all the details right now. We should give him a break."

"Oh, I guess you're right… The excitement really got to me. Sorry 'bout that, Kai."

"Yes, me too." I laugh lightly.

"Don't worry about it guys. I'll tell you all about it later," I replied. Footsteps resounded at the entrance of the room. Moria was walking down the steps with two new magical devices in hand. Moria randomly picked another group to take the test, and it continued for two hours. The rest of the day passed normally.

I grin, moving all my limbs up and down. Today, Moria will announce the results! We all get to move into the large room in the last hallway! That couch sounds nice…

The smell of freshly baked bread reaches my nostrils. When I draw air through my nose, a rush of hunger overcomes me. I get up and do my usual morning routine. Afterward, I head into the main room and exchange greetings with everyone. I take a seat and ask, "What kinda bread’s it this time?"

"Chocolate," Luna responds. Everyone has nearly finished their breakfast, so I quickly munch down the slices of bread on my plate and chug my milk. We walk to class together while having random conversations up to the point of reaching the lecture room door. We remain silent all to way to our seats.

"Who do you think will win?" someone asks around me.

"Is that even a question…? No doubt it will be his group."

"He's right there… Do you think he remembers us…?"

"Just don't make eye contact…"

I knit my eyebrows. Are they talking about me…?

I look to my left, finding several students jerking their heads in the opposite direction. I frown. Sitos says, "Do not mind those insignificants, Kai."

"Yeah…thanks," I say with a skeptical smile on my face. We take our seats and continue talking about what we want in our new room. Hiro fidgets and doesn't contribute to our discussion. "Hmm? Hiro, what's wrong?"

"Oh, nothin' really… Just excited for the results I guess…"

"Yeah, I know what you mean! I have so much energy I can't shake off!" I exclaim while bouncing my heels up and down. There's a faint noise coming from the hallway.

I exclaim as I restlessly bounce my heels up and down. I hear a faint noise coming from the hallway. I look and find Moria entering the room. There he is!

The noise level in the room dies down gradually as he says, "Good morning. Once I have announced the results, you all may continue with your individual Mana bonding training sessions."

He walks down the left side of the room while announcing, "I will start with third place. Remember as the two runner-ups you still get some additional furniture of your choosing. Third place goes to Dune's group with an average score of 94! You lot get one new piece of furniture!"

"Woo!" someone cheers from the left side of the room. I smile broadly while staring at the slip of paper the teacher is holding in front of him. My heart races. I shorten the length between my breaths.

"Second place goes to Coco's group with an average score of 97! You lot will receive two new pieces of furniture!"

"We did it, team!" a girl behind me exclaims. Other voices follow nearby.

Finally, it's our turn!

"Lastly, first place, the group who will get these keys to the first large room 1A is…" I gulp and gradually stretch my lips to a full grin. My heart beats like a drum in the moments before he announces the winner. I jump on my feet and walk forward with my right hand out. "Hina's group with an average score of 98!"

I freeze up and don't move at all. "Each of you will get to choose a new piece of furniture for your new home! Come get your keys right now!"

The room is silent. I turn around with my face still stuck in a grin and my hand out. No one stands up from the crowd. Did I mishear it…? No one's standing up…which means I misheard Luna for…Hina…?

I turn back to Moria and ask, "Umm…you said Luna, right?"

"I am afraid not… I double checked the results and the first place winner is indeed Hina's group. Is anyone from Hina's group here?"

My grin drops into a frown. Silence follows his words again.

"There must be a mistake… Right, Teacher Moria?" Luna asks.

"No matter how you look at it, we are the winners!" Sitos exclaims.

"No… I forgot to mention something else which may clear this matter for you. There is one group that failed and will have to stay for remedial lessons instead of going to magic bonding classes… That group is your group… You do recall that everyone in the group must pass to qualify for the competition, right?"

"What?!" I point my eyebrows down and exclaim. "Who failed?! Everyone received high marks on the practical!"

I find my group looking at each other with suspicious facial expressions. Everyone's gaze lands on Hiro, who is avoiding direct eye contact with anyone. He quietly apologizes, "Uh…sorry guys…"

Hiro! He definitely passed the practical portion… I raise my eyebrows before asking, "Hiro, you failed the written portion?! It was so easy! Moria, what score do you need to pass?"

"70 points or higher."

"Then what score did Hiro receive?!"

"Well, that is…classified…"

"It's okay Teacher…tell everyone what I received… I kinda wanna know too," Hiro says in a lethargic voice.

"Well, if you insist… Your score was 36 points." I knit my eyebrows and frown. I pinch my glabella with my fingers while wondering how it's possible to score so low.

"That's strange… I coulda sworn I got at least 50 points…"

While still frowning, I let go of my face and turn towards Hiro. I stare at him until he cracks a smile that snaps one of my nerves. I grab the collar of his shirt and in his face yell, "You bastard, take this more seriously! My 200 points were worthless!"

"Now, now, Kaister. What's done is done. It was partially our fault for not realizing how clueless he was," Drugo says while pulling me back. My grip on Hiro's shirt gradually loosens. I jerk away from Drugo's grasp and then cross my arms.

"Damn, if only he weren't on our team…" I mutter, thinking no one can hear me.

"Kai, that's not very nice! Apologize!" Luna exclaims while frowning pointing her eyebrows downward. She stares me down with her arms on her hips.

Gah, I made her mad…but I really don't wanna apologize… While still crossing my arms, I look away and pout.

"Sitos, say something to Kai too!"

"Well, I understand how he feels... To be honest, it is just Hiro's fault for being dumb."

"That doesn't help dissolve this situation at all! Sitos, don't have that attitude right now!"

"This situation was caused by Hiro for failing in the first place, are you not mad at all, Luna?"

"Well, I'm disappointed, but like Drugo said, it's partially our fault for not helping him study!"

"Friends, I think you should calm down… It's really not that big of a deal you all are making it out to be…" Drugo says.

"Huh? When is it our responsibility to know every little thing he needs? He did not even ask us for help… Some teamwork…"

"Hello, friends? Do you hear me?"

"Your attitude has been getting on my nerves lately, why do you have to be so cold all the time?!"

"Well, I am tired of you always bossing us aro—"

"Enough!" Moria exclaims, subsequently ending their bickering. Moria sighs. "This is exactly why you failed as a group… Clearly, you lot need to communicate and work on your teamwork. You may have great individual abilities, but lack working together effectively… I do feel slightly bad for Kai, so I will give him a chance. Kai, if you would like you can skip a year or two. I think your abilities are well above a second year Academy student."

I raise my eyebrows as I clutch my fists in front of me all while grinning.

"What, really?! Does that mean I can learn more advanced stuff?"

He laughs lightly. "Oh, yes, you will. And you will get new teammates too."

My thoughts stop, and I only ask, "What?"

"You will move into a new room and obtain new teammates. That is what you wanted, right?" I drop my smile and relax my facial expressions as I turn around and look towards my group.

"You should take it, Kai. I would do it if I were in your shoes."

"Sitos! What's wrong with you?! You should be persuading him to stay!"

"But that is what you want. What do you think he wants to do?" Luna doesn't say anything else. She only stares at me with a pout and teary eyes.

"Take it, Kai… Sorry for draggin' ya down…" Hiro apologizes and turns his back to me.

Hiro… I look at the others. Marin and Drugo are silently watching. I look into Moria's eyes and then gulp. I should take this chance…because I'll be able to learn more things I don't know…! But…

I grit my teeth before saying, "I've made my decision."

I face my group and take a deep breath. "I wanna stay!"

Luna and the others' facial expressions lighten up. Luna exclaims, "Kai!"

"Oh, are you sure?"

"Yeah," I respond while walking toward Hiro. "Because I don't wanna leave my friends… Even if Hiro irritates me a lot, he's my friend too!"

I put my arm around Hiro's neck while grinning."Kai…ya really mean that?"

Some tears well up in his eyes. "Yeah…but you have to pass the retake!"

"Ehhhh…~"

I laugh lightly. "Just kidding, of course! You'll still be my friend…but I really prefer that you pass."

Sitos' arms wrap around Hiro's neck on top of my arms. "Yeah, Hiro… Do not plan on sleeping at all tonight. We are going to cram everything into that tiny brain of yours."

"Ehehe… Thanks for the support guys…"

"You should be proud of your decision, Kai. You will come to learn that the most valuable treasures you can have are friends. I want to reward you with something… How about the same prize as third place? You will get one new piece of furniture of your choosing. I am sure no one else has any objections to that."

I let go of Hiro and turn toward Moria."Really?! Then I want a…"

I purse my lips. Oh, wait…

I glance over towards my group while skeptically smiling. I ask, "What do you guys want? Maybe we should decide by majority…"

"No need, Kai. All of us think that you deserve it, right?" Sitos says while looking toward the others. Everyone nods their heads.

Everyone… I face Moria and exclaim, "I want a couch!"

"Alright, I can get that delivered to your room early evening. Remember you have to stay here for remedial lessons. Everyone else, you are dismissed. Make sure to attend a magic bonding lesson for your red ticket. Winners for the competition should come see me later when you have decided on your pieces of furniture."

And with that everyone except our group left. I can't help but doze off from hearing things I already know for what seems like years. Before I know it, my head drops like a rock. I raise it back up whenever my consciousness returns to me.

I discover a waterfall of drool coming from my mouth. I wipe it off and look up, finding my neck stiff and sore. I massage the back of my neck while checking to see how everyone else is doing. I feel my veins protruding out of my forehead on what's in front of me. Hiro is sleeping in the same position I was in just now. This bastard… Why didn't anyone wake him up…?

I look beyond Hiro and cover my face with my right palm. I sigh. Everyone except Marin has fallen asleep too. Well…that's understandable… I don't think Marin's capable of doing that… I guess I'll have to do it… But really… Why's Moria still lecturing as if we're actually paying attention…?

I make a fist with my right hand and punch the back of Hiro's head. My knuckles throb with pain in rhythm with my heart beats.

"Ow!" Hiro interjects loudly and jerks his head up while putting both of his hands on the back of his head. Subsequently, everyone else wakes up.

I stay awake for as long as I possibly can before my mind decides to shut off again. When I wake up, I find the same scenario as earlier. I look at the back of Hiro's head and sigh deeply. I skeptically curl one side of my lips upward. Did I make the wrong choice after all…?

Chapter 12 – Academy Year 2 – Void Magic

"…and with that this concludes this lesson. Make sure to grab these red tickets when you are ready to leave. There are six of them; one for each of you," Moria explains and points to the table at the front of the room. "Your next task is to run around the building three times. You will find Fulharm waiting for you at the entrance. Good luck tomorrow."

He walks up the stairs and exits the room.

"Who was he even talking to…?" I ask while skeptically curling one side of my lips upward and narrowing my eyes.

"Beats me…" Sitos says as he shrugs his arms. The others make similar motions with confused expressions on their faces. Sitos looks at Hiro and hypothesizes, "I would assume this idiot right here…but…"

Hiro is sleeping peacefully on the desk. I say, "Yeah…so he probably was wishing us good luck…"

"You are probably right. We are going to need a lot of luck," Sitos agrees and nods. Everyone else does the same, when suddenly, Hiro yawns.

"Ahh… Mmm… That was a good nap…" Hiro mumbles in a low energy tone of voice while rubbing his eyes with his fingers. His eyes dart around the room. He stands up while raising both arms in the air and exclaims, "Moria's gone! We're free! Why're we still here? Let's go home."

I clench my fists and grit my teeth, feeling veins protruding from my forehead, but I relax shortly afterward. Instead, I lightly laugh to suppress my frustration and anger. Hiro cocks an eyebrow and asks, "What's so funny, Kai?"

"Oh, nothing… We actually have to run around the building three times for the yellow ticket. Our red ones are on the table over there," I answer, pointing to the table at the front of the room.

"Ehhhhh…but I'm tired… Why do I have to?" Hiro complains and then pouts. I laugh harder. "Kai, you're creepin' me out… Is somethin' wrong?"

"Not particularly… I just remembered a funny joke; that's all… We should get going because we have a long day ahead of us…" I say while grabbing a red ticket. I leave the room, and the rest follow me to the entrance of the Academy. We give Fulharm our red tickets before starting our laps. We start around the same time, but as time goes on, the distance between us changes. I finish my last lap. Panting, I ask, "Instructor Fulfarm! What's my time?!"

"Oh, you're done, Kai? You took about 35 minutes. You were about five minutes slower than Sitos and ten minutes slower than the other boy," he responds as he points to Hiro and Sitos. I bitterly frown at Hiro's smug smile.

I can never understand how Hiro beats me every time… It doesn't make me feel good to be worse than him at something…

I wipe my face with my shirt when drops of sweat burn my eyes.

"Well, it looks like you still have to wait for the rest of your group. Take this." Fulharm hands me the yellow ticket. I sit next to Sitos and Hiro while waiting for the rest of the group.

He finishes first, yet he barely works up a sweat… It perplexes me… Nearly an hour passes before Marin finally finishes her third lap. She pants heavily as she limps over to us with her yellow ticket in hand.

"Haa… Sorry… Did you wait long?" she asks, leaning forward with her arms on her knees while trying to catch her breath.

I reply, "It's okay Marin… You tried your hardest, unlike someone I know…"

Marin's face turns a little red. Hmm… It'd be best if she takes it easy for a while…

"Marin, you can rest here while we exchange the yellow tickets into food supplies. Meet us back at our room when you're ready," I suggest.

A smile emerges on Marin's face as she looks up towards me. "Thanks…"

She hands me her ticket and then sits on the ground. I start walking towards the front of the Academy. Behind me, Luna says, "I think I'm gonna stay with Marin… I'm kinda tired too… You boys can take the supplies back to our home!"

"Don't worry Lunaster, leave it to us." Drugo takes Luna's ticket before we make our way to the pantry in the cafeteria area. We reach our destination in about three minutes.

"Hey Kai, doesn't this bring back memories?" Hiro asks from behind.

"What?"

"We were sittin' over there just a few months ago…"

"But we walk past this cafeteria every day…"

"Yeh, but I just remembered!" Hiro laughs uncontrollably. "Remember that one time? I chased ya with a carrot in my hand, and ya ran around forever!"

A horrifying memory resurfaces in my mind that sends a chill down my spine, but I refrain from showing a reaction. "Did something like that happen? I can't remember that far back…"

Hiro runs up to my right side, stares at me, and then asks, "What, really…? Are ya sure?"

I close my eyes and pretend to think. I open them after a few seconds and respond, "Yeah… I have no idea."

Sitos suddenly appears on my left side and asks, "More importantly, do you remember when Hiro face planted the floor? That moron was not watching where he was going and slipped on a banana peel. It was hilarious! I cannot remember when it happened, though."

I smile and break into a cackle without thinking too much of it. "I remember! It was the third month of the year, week three, and on Monday!"

Sitos stares at me blankly for several seconds. Suddenly, he smirks and then says, "So you do remember… That was the same day Hiro chased you with a carrot…"

The smile on my face freezes in place. Crap, I messed up!

"What, Kai, ya liar!"

"Ah, look we're there already! Let's hurry and exchange our tickets and not keep Marin and Luna waiting too long!"

I run toward the pantry to avoid prosecution from Hiro and Sitos. There's a guard standing outside of it as usual. I walk up to him. "Mister, we wanna go inside to get our supplies!"

I hand the two yellow tickets that I'm holding to the guard.

"You need four more if you want to get inside."

"Yeah, my friends over there are on their way here now," I explain as I point in the direction I came from. I turn my head and see no one. Huh…? Where'd they go?

I turn back towards the guard and nervously smile. "Umm…they must've gotten lost… I'll be back!"

I run back where I came from while looking everywhere for Sitos and company. What, how did they get lost…? We practically go here every day.

I run in circles around the cafeteria area and hallways for fifteen minutes straight. I can't find them. When I start sweating again, I walk instead, eventually passing the guard by the pantry again. He calls out to me, "Hey, you. I thought you already went back to rest?"

I turn towards the guard and cock an eyebrow. "What?"

"Your friends came by about fifteen minutes ago and gave me the rest of the tickets needed to get supplies. They told me you were tired and went to go rest in your room."

I blankly stare into the guard's face for several seconds, before I frown and clench my fists and teeth. Those bastards…!

I break into a full-on sprint towards the living quarters despite being somewhat tired from the pointless goose chase I was sent on. I arrive at the entrance of my dormitory room in just under ten minutes. While still panting, I grab the handle of the door and open it.

"Sito—"

"Kai, you should know better!" Luna exclaims while narrowing her eyebrows. I frown and knit my eyebrows together. "Just because you got a high score on your test doesn't mean you can abandon group responsibilities and do whatever you want!"

"Pardon?"

"Don't play dumb with me. You wanted to go train while everyone else transported our food supplies back home, right guys?"

She turns her head towards the guys who betrayed me, where I find Sitos' and Hiro's smiling faces. Sitos points at me and says, "Yes, look how sweaty he is. It is all the proof you need."

"What?! No, they're lying! I'm sweaty because I ran around looking for them!"

"He's guilty! Just give 'im the punishment already!"

I narrow my eyes on Hiro, who seems to be in high spirits despite what happened earlier. Damn traitor… Every single one of them… Wait…where's Drugo…?

I look around the room while pursing my lips. Drugo and Marin are nowhere to be found. Focusing my ears, the sound of running water is barely noticeable. So that's how it is…

When I smirk back at Hiro and Sitos, their merry expressions fade into worrisome ones. "Hey Luna, why don't you just ask Drugo? You won't believe me, but Drugo always tells the truth, right?"

My suggestion stops her frown, and she cocks an eyebrow. Drugo's door opens, and then he walks into the common room. Luna turns her head toward Drugo and inquires, "Oh, good timing Drugo. Can you explain why Kai didn't come back with you three?"

"Oh, that. Sitoster and Hiroster wanted to play a prank on Kai and pretended to get lost. While Kai was running around, we went into the pantry and came back here. Why do you ask?"

"I understand now. Thank you, Drugo," Luna says, turns her head back, and then walks toward me.

"Sorry, Kai…for not believing you… Can you forgive me…?" she asks as she clasps one of my hands with both of hers near her chest. She stares at me with puppy-dog eyes. I blush, looking back and forth between her teary eyes and my hand. My heart pounds.

She's…she's so cute… My lips are shaking before I respond, "Yeah…it's okay; I forgive you…"

I smile, and then her face melts into a grin. "Really?! That's great!"

Either Sitos or Hiro clicks his tongue. After looking in their direction, I find Sitos looking away with a frown. Luna turns toward them too and then says, "I don't have anything to say to you two."

I gulp as I stare down at my hand. She's still holding onto my hand…

The sound of another door opening resounds. Marin walks into the common room. Luna finally lets go of my hand, turns toward Marin, and exclaims, "Ah, Marin! Let's make lunch now!"

"Sure." Luna makes her way into the kitchen. Marin follows her and smiles as she passes me along the way.

"Well, aren't you guys lucky? You don't get a punishment," I say as I take a seat at the table.

"I thought she would be furious when she found out…" Sitos says as he takes a seat opposite side of me. Hiro sits himself between us at the end of the table. Drugo takes his seat next to Sitos. "More importantly, I think it is time you told us about Emdos. Who is he, really?"

"Yeah, tell us!"

"Mmm… There's not really much to tell… Let me think…" I close my eyes as I try to recollect my thoughts. I open them and say, "Well… According to Emdos, he was good friends with my parents, and they were adventurers together. Emdos later told me that they died in an accident a year after I was born. So, he quit being an adventurer and raised me."

My eyes follow Luna walking past the table and into her room before I continue, "And later, Emdos started teaching me Mana control when I was six."

"Hmm, I see… But you still have not explained how Emdos knew you were special and would not be in danger of manipulating Mana at a young age."

"Uh…actually… I don't really know either… Maybe my parents were really talented, and he just knew I would be too… Either way, I trust Emdos… He raised and took care of me, after all."

"Hey, is he strong?! What does he look like?" I don't answer Hiro's question immediately while my eyes follow Luna going back to the kitchen area.

"Uhh…yeah, he's really strong! I haven't seen him fight a lot, but I've watched him effortlessly take care of thieves and stuff! Umm… He has short brown hair, a mustache, and a beard. Now, tell me about your parents, Hiro!"

"Oh, actually… I don't have parents and neither does Drugo," Hiro explains as he points to Drugo with his right thumb. "We're both from the same orphanage in the poor part of the Residential District here in Drosera."

"Oh… So you know some of the other kids from the orphanage that go here?"

"Not exactly. We were the only two same-aged kids at our orphanage. There might be some first years that we recognize, but we haven't seen them," Drugo explains.

"Luna, what are you doing…?" Marin asks in a barely audible voice. Luna whispers something to Marin, but I can't make anything of it.

"Sitos, tell us ‘bout your family now!" Hiro exclaims.

"As you guys already know, I am from the Royal District. My parents are pretty wealthy, and we lived in this huge mansion. I have an older brother, an older sister, and a younger brother. There were also a lot of servants that did work around my home. I think my dad is one of the king's close aides, but I am not sure. Two years ago, my dad hired some weapon specialist in the army to train me."

"He's close to the king? That's kinda cool…" Hiro says and then directs his voice toward the girls. "What ‘bout ya girls? Everyone else has shared their stories already."

Marin glances at Luna before turning to us. "Umm… My parents are A-class adventurers…so they didn't raise me by themselves… They usually visited me once a week."

She smiles widely and continues, "But I became really good friends with the maid they hired to take care of me. She's almost like a second mom!"

"Wow!" Hiro exclaims as he jumps up from his seat. "Isn't that the second highest adventurer class? Your parents sound amazin’, Marin! How strong are they?"

"I don't know… I haven't seen them fight or anything like that… What about you, Luna?" Luna is stirring something in a pot on top of the stove. She doesn't show any reaction to Marin's question. Several seconds pass. "Luna?"

"Huh? Oh… A friend of my mom raised me in a village called Lycorias in Drosera, near the border to Elbar."

"Oh? What happened to your parents?" Hiro inquires.

"I didn't have a dad, and my mom died when I was six," Luna explains in a cheery voice with a strange smile. I quirk an eyebrow. Afterward, she snickers.

What's wrong with Luna…? The others sitting at the table return similarly confused looks before looking back at Luna.

Marin asks, "Luna, what's so funny?"

"Nothing," she responds and then stops laughing but continues to smile. She grabs a ladle and an empty bowl and announces, "Lunch is ready! It's Kai's favorite; soup! I'll serve everyone, come here!"

Everyone receives their own serving of soup, and we sit down at the table.

"Hey, Luna… Why is my soup the only one that looks…different…?" Sitos asks. I stop slurping my meal for a moment and stare at his.

He's right…there're carrots and other stuff in there…

Luna smiles and asks, "That's because you like carrots right? There're all kinds of stuff in there that you like! By the way, I expect you to finish it all."

"That is nice of you. Well, then I will start enjoying this!" Sitos scoops up the contents of the soup and puts it into his mouth. I think he chews it no more than three times before he suddenly gags. He opens his mouth widely and then empties the contents of his mouth onto the table. He stands up from his chair and yells, "Bleh! The fuck is this?!"

"It's soup made especially for you!" Luna exclaims with a smile that sends shivers down my spine. A terrifying memory resurfaces from my mind. I understand his pain.

"Haha Sitos! I get normal soup!" Hiro gloats.

Sitos narrows his eyebrows, points at Hiro, and exclaims, "Why does he not receive this inedible soup too?!"

"He comes tomorrow."

"Eh?" Hiro's care-free expression disappears.

"I don't want him feeling bad when he has to study for his test tomorrow… We need to get started on that so hurry up, won't you?"

"Fine… I just have to eat it, right?" Everyone enjoys their soup while Sitos bitterly consumes his. He covers his mouth, holds onto his stomach, and says, "I cannot believe I just ate this… I do not feel too good…"

"Isn't that great, Sitos? I think I can forgive you now."

"Can you at least tell me what that crunchy thing was…?"

"Crunchy thing…?" Luna asks as she points her eyes upward. "Oh… That was probably Mister Fluffy."

"Mister…Fluffy…?"

"Yeah… There was this spider that made himself cozy in the corner of my room. I named him Mister Fluffy," she responds and then giggles. Sitos stands up suddenly, subsequently knocking down his chair on the ground. He runs into his room. A gag and water splashing resound.

I chuckle. I'm glad nothing's wrong with Luna… She was probably just excited about this little prank.

After our meal, we all get our notes for theory class and help Hiro understand the material. The studying continues for the majority of the day with a break during dinnertime. Sitos, unfortunately, doesn't have any appetite despite having a normal meal this time. We continue late into the night and finally call it around midnight when everyone retires.

The fated hour arrives tomorrow in the lecture room. Everyone silently watches Hiro as he takes his retake exam. Miraculously, Hiro finishes in just 30 minutes; half the time allotted to take the test. Moria takes his test and immediately looks it over. He stands up and says, "Okay, I have finished grading Hiro's test."

Did he pass…?

"I passed right? I'm pretty confident this time," Hiro says with his chest puffed out in front of him and arms crossed. I gulp as I focus my eyes on Moria.

"He failed," Moria states while displaying a dire look on his face. I only open my mouth and silently gape.

Are you…serious…?

"Well… I will let it slide this time… He was only a point shy from passing. I can tell he worked hard to get this score," Moria says as he changes his grim expression into a more light-hearted one. A deep sigh leaves me as I put my hand on my chest.

"Hiro the Great, you finally did it…" I say as I walk up to Hiro and then punch him in the shoulder.

"Good for you, Hiroster," Drugo says.

"Now that this idiot finally passed, we can move to magic bonding classes…"

"Technically, he didn't pass, though…"

"Don't muck over the details, Kai!" Hiro exclaims while having his usual care-free laugh. I force a smile in response.

"Well, this is all great, but I really wanna attend classes I was supposed to go to yesterday! See ya all later!" I declare in a hurry as I run up the steps towards the exit of the room.

"Kai, wait!" I look behind me and find Luna running after me. With a smile, she says, "I'll come with you. We're both going to Fire magic bonding class, right?"

Oh yeah… Luna's going there too! I wait a few seconds for Luna to catch up before leaving the classroom, and we head for the second floor of the building. Hmm… What room number was it again…?

I aimlessly pick a random direction to walk in while looking around on both sides of the hallway.

"Kai, where're you going?"

I stop and turn around. She's pointing in the direction of another corridor I passed a few seconds ago. My face burns up. I put my hand on the back side of my head and say, "Oh, um… I wa-was just testing to see if you knew where we were going!"

I follow Luna, eventually going into a room on the left side of the corridor. Inside, there are other students emitting fire from their hands. An old man walks toward with robes similar to Moria, and he's bald. "Ah, you must be part of the group that failed the exams yesterday, right?"

I smile bitterly and laugh. "Yeah, I guess…"

He laughs and responds, "I'm just messing with you, boy! I know who you are. Moria informed me about the results of your test yesterday. You were the cause of that rumble two days ago right? Well, you two are a day late, but for now, just take this."

He hands Luna and me some kind of scroll with a strange, complicated-looking design on it. I knit my eyebrows as I examine both sides of the piece of parchment realizing that one side is blank. I intently stare at the side with the symbol on it. This symbol looks kinda familiar…

"What's this for?" I ask.

"That's a Magic Scroll. Specifically, it contains the keyword for a Basic Fire spell meant for training purposes. Basically, you can instantaneously learn the keyword to this magic, and then you can get a feel for how to bond the fire element to your Mana. Truthfully, you can learn how to manipulate fire given that you have the innate talent without using a Magic Scroll, but it greatly decreases the steep learning curve," the old man explains.

I raise my eyebrows. Wait a minute…! This looks really similar to that page I couldn't get past in the book Emdos gave me!

A smile emerges on my face, and my heart rate speeds up.

"Well, give it a try. To use the scroll, pour your Mana into the scroll. This is a Basic spell programmed using Scrap Mana, so you only need Scrap Mana to activate it." I hold the scroll with symbol-side up with my left hand while I put my right palm on top of it. I pour out Scrap Mana as the man instructed into the symbol. The symbol disappears, and then the scroll disintegrates into thin air while something appears in my head like I knew it all along.

"Everyone, get back! He's going to blow up the room!" a random boy exclaims. Other students back away from me after his warning. I cock an eyebrow and frown.

Why's everyone so scared of me…?

The old man turns toward them and says, "Don't worry everyone, as I mentioned before, the spell is programmed using Scrap Mana, so it is impossible to have such an effect."

Hmm… So the keyword's scorch… I guess I'll try it out… I recall from theory class that I have to gather a sufficient amount of Mana at the designated exit before shouting the keyword… I see. The exit is the right palm… I raise my right arm in front of me with the palm facing forward. "Scorch!"

A small amount of fire exits my right palm, and it goes forward about a foot before disappearing into thin air. Strangely, I don't feel any of the heat anywhere near my right palm, but I can feel some of the heat on every other part of my body. I attempt to change the direction of where my palm is facing and the fire comes out from the same angle in the direction I point my palm in.

"Magnificent! You got it on your first try! I suppose you are as good as Moria said you are." The fire stops coming out of my hand after about five seconds.

Hmm… There are a lot of stuff that happened in that short time period… I think some Fire element bonded with the Mana I gathered to the inside of my palm…and at the same time, they were instructed to leave in a straight direction at a given speed uniformly… And other stuff too…This is so complicated… My smile gradually transforms into a grin. I can't wait to practice this later! More importantly, that page in the book!

"Scorch!" Luna shouts. I turn to her, finding the same phenomenon in front of me.

"Nice, Luna!"

"Thank you, Kai," she answers with a smile.

We spend the remaining class time trying to bond our Mana with the Fire without the keyword. It is hard as I previously imagined, as I have no idea how to do it. When class ends, we obtain our red tickets and go off to do the usual endurance training for our yellow tickets. After lunch, I hurry into my room while locking the door. I think the book's still in my backpack…

I walk towards the closet and open it. In the corner, I find the backpack where I left it, grab it, and then open it. I toss the backpack aside and then walk toward the bed while flipping to the page with the strange symbol. I sit down on the bed as I stare down onto the page in question. I grin while putting my right palm on the page. This is it…! I'll do the same thing as earlier and put Scrap Mana into it…

I do just that, but nothing happens, so I quirk an eyebrow. That's weird… Oh, wait…this means that this spell uses Mana of higher quality than Scrap Mana, right…? I guess I'll try Unrefined Mana next.

Nothing happens again as I pour Unrefined Mana into the scroll. My forehead gets slightly damp from sweat. Could this be…? I need to use my Mana to do it? I might as well try Rich Mana first…

I attempt it with Rich Mana and the same result occurs. I gulp before releasing my Mana into the book. The symbol finally disappears and then the paper disintegrates. The information enters my head and the page behind is revealed. I put down the book and put my hand out in front of me while also gathering my Mana inside my palm. "Gate!"

A dark-purple gooey thing appears in front of me. I knit my eyebrows. What the hell?

I move around it, realizing that it is nearly flat in the vertical direction. I hesitantly move my hand toward it. I gulp, before finally mustering the courage to touch it. I skeptically curl one side of my lips upward as I don't feel anything despite putting my entire arm through it. I'm so confused… What's this do? I can't see through it, and it doesn't appear to do anything…

I sit down on the bed and pick up the book again. I immediately look at the eye-catching words on the current page. I gape at it for nearly ten seconds. Void…magic…? What's that…?

I shiver despite it being warm in the room. I jerk back in a jerking motion when a sudden knock on my door resounds. Drugo asks, "Kaister? I heard you yell something, is everything good?"

"Yeah, I'm just practicing some magic!" My heart beats like a drum. Calm down, Kai… The door is locked… I definitely can't let anyone know about this. I'm already so far ahead in the learning process compared to everyone else; if people knew I don't know how they will react…

I look more closely on the page and the words written on it. This page looks a lot older than the pages before it…and the handwriting's completely different… I guess I'll keep reading it.

To my son, Kai, this book is dedicated to you, our last hope… This book contains all of the knowledge of Void magic, the manipulation of time and space that we have accumulated…

It takes several seconds for me to process what I just read.

To my son, Kai… This was written by my father...! I'm not sure what the rest means. I purse my lips as I narrow my eyes, thinking about past events. Is this what Emdos meant when he said I was special…? Maybe he knew that my parents had a magic no one's heard of… I have so many questions I wanna ask him now. I'm gonna keep reading!

I continue to smile as I prepare to flip the page, but then I remember; the frightened reactions of my classmates yesterday and today. What should I do…? I don't wanna be ostracized by everyone… I was even given the option to skip a year…

I close my eyes to think long and hard. I have some kinda unique Mana no one else has… That's enough, right…?

I open my eyes and close the book. I put it back into the backpack, store it in the closet, and then lay down back on my bed. The strange purple thing has already disappeared.

"Hey Kai, I am going to go train. Come with me." Sitos says from outside the door.

"Yeah, sure!" I respond, run to the door, unlock it, and then continue my day like any other day.

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Moalex
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Moalex wrote a review · Sat Aug 05, 2017 12:11 pm

Hey SkyWind! Imoalex here for a Review. This has been in the green room for quite some time and I can probably guess why. This is very lengthy because you have two chapters in one publish so the lengthy read can be a bit intimidating. For me, I like to publish one chapter at a time. But let's focus on the more important thing for your story. As this is chapter 11 and 12, I have not read the other chapters so I will do my best review this while piecing together whatever I can that might have appeared in previous chapters.

"I wake up, open my eyes, and stare at the ceiling with my limbs fully stretched out on my bed."

You can delete "open my eyes," "I wake up," pretty much lets us know you're doing that. Also, "stretched." You're speaking in first person and from your tense from the very beginning, I take it that it's present. You can rewrite it as, "and stare at the ceiling as I stretch my limbs on my bed."

"Ahem," Moria interjects. "I can explain what just happened… You see, Kai gave the Mana instructions before he released it out of his body… First, he probably gathered the rich Mana from his body and moved it to his arm. Then, he assigned instructions to the Mana beginning with the calculations of the path required to reach the magical items. Since we could not see the Mana leaving Kai's body, it must mean that he released the inactive form of Mana and put separate instructions that activated the Mana. As he just said, it activated after a few seconds after reaching the programmed destination.

You are missing a quotation mark from this explanation. Also, After reading your second paragraph, I'm guessing you're writing in past-tense and not present-tense. So you're going to want to change the beginning.

Hmm? He doesn't seem as surprised as Hiro. As expected of Sitos, he already adjusted to the situation… What do I tell them… I can't reveal either the book or my Mana… I think before replying,

In this passage, you italicized the character's thoughts. You don't need to tell us that this is what your character was thinking. The italicized word already gives us that description.

I notice that you have a ton of dialogue in your story. Of course, I'm not saying it's a bad trait, but the reader doesn't necessarily need to be reading an entire conversation. In this case, it's sometimes better to replace dialogue with action. In chapter 11, some of your characters already do that like when Hiro failed the written test. However, it is followed by a large amount of dialogue of the group arguing with each other. As the reader, I grew tired of reading the argument and wondered if this was relevant to the story. Perhaps this would provide background info for future chapters to get connected with the characters but reading an entire argument bored me.

Regarding any positive features of your story. I personally am a fan of magic, fantasy, and supernatural. As soon as I saw your title, I decided to review it despite the lengthy two chapters. From the first few paragraphs of chapter 11, it's clear that these are people who can use magic in a magic academy that has formed teams to work with each other. That really drove me further to reading your story. And honestly, I would have liked to read more. I read up to chapter 11 but stopped right before 12. The reason why is because there is just so much dialogue.

That is all I have to say from reading this chapter of your story. I hope this helps in anyway. Keep writing and have a good day!

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jamgalloway
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Hello, there! This has been around for a bit so I thought I'd review it. I haven't read any other chapters of the story though, so my thoughts on this are based on this chapter alone. First off, I'm just going to point out a few sentences that seem like they could be written to sound a bit more smooth. And I'll write some examples of what may sound better instead, but it's of course up to you on whether to keep it as it is or change it.

So, from this:

Moria walked to the wall he created, put his hand on the wall.

To this:

Moria walked up to the wall he created and put his hand on it.

And on this part:

"I am interested in that too," Sitos said with unwavering eyes.

Hmm? He doesn't seem as surprised as Hiro. As expected of Sitos, he already adjusted to the situation… What do I tell them… I can't reveal either the book or my Mana… I think before replying, "Well… Emdos trained me since I was six up until last year when I came to the Academy…"

I want to say as I side note that Sitos' line made me crack up, whether or not that was your intention. He was just so...stiff, lol, like a robot. Most people don't talk like that, but if there's something up that causes him to be this way, then I'm all for it. But really what I wanted to point out was the second paragraph; I think it would run better if you had the narrator's thoughts separated from their reply, maybe like this:

Hmm? He doesn't seem as surprised as Hiro. As expected of Sitos, he already adjusted to the situation. But...what do I tell them? I can't reveal the book or my Mana...

"Well, Emdos trained me since I was six up until last year when I came to the Academy," I say.

This being said, I think maybe you should rewrite the first couple sentences of this person's thoughts. The "What do I tell them?" and "I can't reveal the book or my Mana..." parts were good, but the rest didn't really sound like someone's *thoughts*, you know?

And in this line, I honestly have no idea what Hiro is trying to say, so I'd write it a little different:

"Also, why didja keep that ya can use Rich Mana a secret?!" Hiro immediately asked.

This is probably something you'd notice in a proof read, but I'll go ahead and point it out anyway; you repeated yourself in this two paragraphs:

Yeah, I know what you mean! I have so much energy I can't shake off!" I exclaim while bouncing my heels up and down. There's a faint noise coming from the hallway.

I exclaim as I restlessly bounce my heels up and down. I hear a faint noise coming from the hallway. I look and find Moria entering the room. There he is!

Also, wanted to point out that in these lines, you repeated yourself almost word for word, and they really weren't all that far apart, so it's really obvious:

I skeptically curl one side of my lips upward.

I ask while skeptically curling one side of my lips upward....

Anyway, there's a lot more moments like this I could point out, but I'll stop there so this review won't be too long.

One of the biggest problems I see with this is the dialogue. Don't take this the wrong way, but most of the dialogue here is stiff and feels unrealistic. I can't imagine anyone saying these things in real life. So that needs a lot of work. If it was just certain spots I'd point in out, but it's pretty much the majority of the dialogue.

The pacing isn't too bad, but I think there is also a bit too much dialogue as well. I suggest adding in some more of the narrator's thoughts for sure, as there's not enough of that, and maybe some more action too. But definitely a bit less dialogue and bit more of the narrator's thoughts.

Plot-wise, I didn't really find this to be that interesting. Even though I don't know much of what's going on anyway, from what I read in this chapter, I would not be interested enough to continue reading. No offense meant by this, of course, this is just my opinion on it. This seems more like a book for young kids.

As for the characters, none of them had any defining traits or really stood out. I don't know how old they are supposed to be, but they definitely come across as about 11, so if that's how old they are, then I guess that's good, but if they're supposed to be older, then it definitely doesn't feel realistic in that aspect. Personally, I'd make a little list of all of the characters, and write down traits each one of them has, as well as their flaws, hobbies, maybe backgrounds too, etc. It honestly helps quite a bit. Especially when you're writing, you can stop and think, "Would this character do this?" and with all of that stuff you know about that character, you'll be able to figure out whether their actions are accurate or not.

On the plus side, your grammar in this was really good. I saw minor mistakes, but that's stuff you'll probably notice in an edit and none of them were repeated actions.

As for believability/clarity, I think there were some parts of this that were unclear about what someone was trying to say or what was going on, but for the most part, it was plenty clear. That aspect in this story is good, most things in it are obvious. But, none of this stuff is really believable. Like, it is fiction, but it should still have a realm of realism with characters/society/interactions/etc. Basically, most things about this story feels unrealistic right now.

All in all, I hope this wasn't too harsh and that it helps. I don't think sugarcoating or lying helps anyone improve, which is the goal, so I don't do it. So I'm not going to lie, this does need a lot of work, but I'm not saying you need to give up or some bull****. You should've seen how god-awful my writing was when I first started. It was atrocious. But it's gotten a lot better over time! That's all this story needs. Time and hard work.

Also, could you start shortening the amount you post at once? I'm quite guilty of this myself, but what I mean is, separate the chapters unless they're really short, if you would. It's a lot to read and review, as these chapters certainly weren't short. I bet you would get more reviews on some of these if they weren't quite as long as well, as it takes quite a bit of time just to read through it all, let alone make the review.

But yes, this is about all I have to say, and I hope it helped! If you have any questions, want help or advice with anything, want me to edit or review something, just want to talk, or whatever, just let me know and I'd be happy to. Keep writing and good luck!!! :)

Thanks for the review. There's not much to say since this is the only chapter you've read, but I've heard the critique of the unrealistic dialogue before, so that's okay. I honestly don't really know how to make it better and putting time into hardcore editing isn't my priority right now. Just a note I put the 18 tag on there because stuff happens later in the story. It makes no sense to tag one chapter one rating while another chapter another rating. I just use an overall rating. I post a lot of chapters at once because I'm already writing chapter 48 and the time it takes to gather points takes too long. I probably won't be posting any more chapters on this website. My chapters have an average word count of 4500 and honestly in some chapters nothing exciting really happens so if I shorten the posts to 2000 words or less, even less happens in that particular instance. I can only spend like 10 hrs a week on the story. Not enough for even releasing 1 chapter a month. It's been 34 days since I released the last chapter and I'm nowhere close to finishing the next.

I do the same thing with the rating on my book. Even if that chapter has no swearing or any kind of violence or anything at all, I still put 18 since others do. I can understand being busy, I've been unable to spend as much time working on my book as I want also, what with work and activities and an occasional social life. But if you ever want help or anything in your spare time just let me know!



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