The Vacuum Cleaner

by Shadowhunter14

Published February 17, 2011

In Poetry

I wrote this poem about 3 years ago. I thought it was awesome at the time; it even got published in my school's yearbook, but now I'm not such a big fan....I really put it up just for fun.:D See what you think, it's only four lines but I hope you enjoy reading it anyway.

The anteater begins to feast, dust starts to flutter
Ploughing through grime like a knife through butter.
Its monstrous mouth sucks in dirt through a funnel
Stretching long and thin like a dark, eerie tunnel.

Thanks for reading :)

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qaralynn
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qaralynn commented Comment · Feb 18, 2011

hahah lovely poem XD It made me laugh..
good work, I like it

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Snoink
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Snoink wrote a review Review · Feb 17, 2011

Oooh, I do like this! I would like to see it a bit longer, but only because it's rather fantastic! I love your word choice and your imagery. The rhyming also doesn't appear to be forced -- indeed, the rhyming actually seems to help out the poem and gives it a certain cadence.

I like it. :)



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