Heya, Scar2D2! Casanova here for a review!
Anyway- my first thought. WHAT IS THIS ABOUT? It could be taken as a romance, or a lot of things really, but the true thing eludes me!
Anyway- to the points.
The first thing that I noticed about this poem is the capitalization, or the lack thereof. It's not a /have to/ case, but something that makes it look better and stuff.
The next thing was the use of,"centre." in the poem. Has french origin, if I recall correctly. I don't know if you meant to use this or not(I have no clue what it means) or if you simply misspelled,"center."
The next thing I noticed was that the third stanza was a bit shorter than the rest, and that kind of threw off the flow a bit. But I guess this could be used as personal preference and not an actual /have to/ thing. n
The imagery in this poem was really good- but I felt as if some words you used were to just be unique- and it kind of threw the poem off for me.
Examples: Mottled, lurid, lichen, etc.
Those words kind of made it seem unusual to me- but I'm not used to reading poetry that has them so I'm completely opinionated about that.
The overall idea and structure of this poem was good, and I hope to read more from you.
Oh, and also, WELCOME TO THE SITE NEWBIE.
That is all.
Have a great day.
Sincerely- Matthew Casanova Aaron.
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