Five worlds that form perfection,
Five worlds, pure as the dove,
Five worlds that give all happiness
Five worlds of what's above.
The first world, beauty to the eye:
Shade and shape make fair;
Yet if you were to search for hours,
His face would not be there.
The second, music to the ears:
Songs, gentle, and low,
And by all means, do strain to hear,
His voice, you will not know.
Third is velvet to the touch:
Somooth and soft and warm,
But judging by his brittle skin,
You could not find his form.
The fourth is flowers to the nose:
Scents that smell so sweet,
And roam around this world all week,
His smell, you will not meet.
The fifth world - sugar to the tongue:
I can't speak to compare,
But if you were to kiss his lips,
I doubt their taste is there.
But one more world, which I love best:
The world that is my own,
In all I love, and all loves me,
Here he finds his home.
Five worlds that formed perfection,
Five worlds, pure as the dove,
Five worlds that gave me happiness,
Until I
fell
in
love.
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I. LOVED. THIS. I can't even write a review on it, because ... well, it wouldn't be a review it'd just be poetic praise. I loved the rhyme scheme, the message, the stanzas, every single line, down to the last work. Perfection.
This is very well writen; the writing style is very clean, and it is a smooth poem to recite. I loved the structure and the story behind it.
Hey,
This is going to be a pretty useless review, seeing as I can't find anything to criticize. The rhymes were all there and great. The flow was smooth. The overall idea and the words you used: great as well.
I think this is a beautiful poem, or verse, and all the things needed for a good work is here.
Keep writing! ^^
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