Young Writers Society

Hey there! Plume here, with a review!

This piece was incredibly inspiring. I don't think the whole capitol insurrection/Trump's impeachment will be leaving the mind of any American any time soon. You do a great job at encapsulating both denouncing the actions of the past while providing a call to action and a more uplifting and hopeful take at the end. I thought this was an incredibly powerful piece of writing.

One thing I loved about this piece was how much it made me realize about our country. The part especially where you drafted the amendment was so striking. It kinda made me realize that the reason we don't have a law for this in the first place is because it's so terrible that no one would ever think about doing it in the first place. It's one of those things that's just kinda implied in being a gracious human being: if you lose, don't rally your supporters and stage a violent coup on a government building. It should have gone without saying. It should have, but it didn't. And it's so terrible.

One thing I wondered was what you intend to do with this piece. It kind of read like a persuasive essay/editorial, but it was on the shorter side. I wondered if you could perhaps expand it, like the other review mentioned, providing more references/points to convince your readers.

Other than that, I think this was a well structured piece about a topic you really care about! I completely agree with you 100% about the whole "insurrection" thing; it's kinda scary that Trump could still run for office. For sake of not ending this review on a bad note: keep up the amazing writing/interest in politics!! I'm sure you'll achieve great things.

This is very well informed essay with a lot of references and terms which is effective in persuading the reader and getting across your point. However, could you add more detail as to what the former president did? This essay is very good, but I would recommend adding more facts about the backstory behind what happened- this would encourage more people to get on your side and additionally provide the opportunity for your audience to have their own, independent opinion. Could you perhaps explain it in further context? How many lives were lost that day? What are the consequences of what happened? Could you write this in such a way like teaching somebody about something that they have never heard of. Some people may not know what happened that day, and would be unsure as to what they are agreeing to. If they are given the exact knowledge of it, people would be more willing to support your policies. Maybe you could relate to them or add some rhetorical questions to make them think about the consequences of that even.

"On January 6, 2021 a violent mob attacked the United States Capitol to obstruct the process of our democracy and stop the counting of presidential electoral votes. This insurrection caused injury, death and destruction in the most sacred space in our Republic,” Congresswoman Liz Cheney (R-Wyoming) said as she explained her support for impeaching former President Trump. “There has never been a greater betrayal by a President of the United States of his office and his oath to the Constitution.”

Could you extend on this quote?

I hope this helps and well done on this article.