I very much enjoyed this story! The writing was smooth, and more importantly, consistent. The tone of the narrator never altered. It was distant enough to keep it brief, but not so that I couldn't connect.
I will say it was a bit predictable in that I saw it coming that Anahita would be the one to find the genie by being a good person. What I didn't see coming was that the manticore (I know what that is, I feel so cultured!) was the genie. That was cool.
The word "Genie" automatically makes me think "Grants three wishes, stuck in a lamp, etc." not so much having herbs. I get that he'd want to have her heal her mother herself instead of doing it for her, but I feel like it would hurt no one if maybe passing the tests leads to getting a wish granted and she wishes for her mother's good health. Just a thought, I know that you have your own vision, that's obvious from how well structured and awesome this whole piece was.
Again, very well done. I enjoyed this story immensely. Keep up the good work!
PM me with any questions, concerns, or statements!
~Q
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