Hmmm
I am curious what "seminole" you're referring to, because I can't seem to find a tree type with that name.
This is a very short poem, and while I like the tiny message it's trying to covey, I don't think it conveys it well. It sounds like the caption to something else. Why does the narrator so firmly assert that his spirit will live? Was there a question that his spirit wouldn't live? What's threatening his spirit?
How exactly does something smell like death?
The comparison seems cliched anyway. It's not a new concept.
All we get from this poem is questions, and while that can sometimes be good depending on the questions, I don't think it is good in this case. I think you need a little more detail for your readers to have a little more understanding.
As this is such a short poem, I don't have much else to say. More's the pity.
hope this helps. Let me know if you have any questions! Keep writing!
~fortis
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