I am a woman in love with death.
Death offers me roses,
Whispers reassurance on the dark days,
Death always believed in me.
See death has never made me question if I'm doing the right thing,
If everything was just pointless,
If I truly am letting everyone down.
Now I, am not stupid,
I know that death has an image problem,
but that is because you have it wrong!
Life is the one that hurts me.
Life is the one that tells me I am not enough.
He cuts me and hits me, and makes me wish I was with death.
When I'm with life, I dream of death.
I am a woman in love with death.
And tonight, we'll marry.
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Hey there! This was a fantastic poem, and I really enjoyed reading it. I thought I would stop by and leave you a review! Let's get right into it:
Right from the title, I was assuming that this would be a love story, perhaps between two people who are getting married. But right when I started reading, I realize that this was slightly different than what I was anticipating. Actually, this was a love story between a woman and death.
I love the first person narrative that this is as well. It gives such eerie feelings when you say things about death in this way, such as how it is always believed in you. This makes me feel like the person who is speaking, perhaps feels very lonely, or isolated, like they aren't receiving this, love from anyone else, so they are turning to death, who becomes their lover and away. This is spooky, and I love it!
OK, there is so much to unpack here. We start talking about life, life is actually the one who hurts you. You describe life, and the way that you would describe an abusive boyfriend or girlfriend. Life is physically abusive, and makes you yearn to be with us other lover of yours. Actually, what you're saying is that the life you're living makes you wish that you were dead. Then the last two lines were awesome. You go back to stating that you're a woman in love with death. But then we go back to the title of this poem which is about a marriage. You quote that your marriage will be tonight, which makes it sound like perhaps this was some sort of suicide note or death letter from this person saying that she's going to die tonight. I could see this poem, either being a very literal sort of dark poem, or being included in some sort of fantasy mythical story. I love the tone that you use throughout. It was simple, but spoken a very professional way that made it sound real. You do a great job at capturing these dark emotions. Though, I would love to see a little bit more about life, perhaps. What would be super interesting as a poem about life entirely, perhaps, when you used to be engaged to him or something. I would love to see some more small details like that and emotions. Maybe some physical descriptions, too. But overall, this was fantastic, and I loved it so so much! I really hope to read more of your poetry soon. Keep writing and Have a wonderful day!!!
Your friend,
Ellie
Death is something that many seek, but it strikes fast and cruelly. Unexpectedly.
This poem addresses the issue of death at will. It gives a pained expression that many see, but don't understand.
The cause of this worldview is a dark one. The lack of faith in life.
Life is a cruel beast, hunting and hurting, merciless and unforgiving, but once you tame it, it is a powerful ally, giving you wealth and power.
All people go through the pain. The only difference is how you handle it.
There are two types of people. This poem shows one clearly. Those who die.
And the other...
Those who live.
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You really put a lot of effort into this! And none of that effort was anywhere near wasted! I really love it- especially the personification and symbolism. It's conveyed so well in the short, digestible poem. I read it so many times, and it never got old!
I love that the poem starts out with a kind of happy opening line of "I'm in love with death." Just alone, the line could be interpreted in so many different ways, but the poem develops this idea so well! I really hope you didn't have to (and will never have to) go through something like this; no one deserves to.
I love this poem!