The Dandelion flows to and fro
To and fro
Freely in the wind
The Dandelion is a lovely flower
That doesn't make me sick
I love to pick them and make a crown
And claim to be the Dandelion ruler
The Dandelion is a special flower
Because my dog would eat them
With no care
The Dandelion is a funny flower
As it roars so strong when it gets cut down
The lawnmower hates it
The Dandelion is a calm flower
It makes me think of peace
It makes me think of happiness as it flows in the wind
With it's bright yellow flower as it flows in the wind
The Dandelion is a bright flower
It makes me think of joy
And birth of new and of old
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Hello!!! Here for a review!!!
Nitpicks:
First of all, it's repetitive. Although repetition sounds good in many poems, but here it only sounds as repetitive and rebundant. And flows is not at all a good word here. Maybe, here u could use a word like move.
Again repetitive. Avoid it.
Overall:
It was very good. I really liked it. I loved how you described that simple flower!!! The most stunning part was when you told that it doesn't make u sick!! That's a thing mostly overlooked.
Great read. Keep writing!!
~Forever
Hey there! MapleWay here dropping by with a quick review!
This was a really cool piece about dandelions. I honestly couldn't describe them better myself! I really enjoyed how you kept repeating the word dandelion. It made the poem seem a lot more playful and fun! Also, the line, "Because my dog would eat them With no care" Brought a huge smile to my face. Because it is so true though. Dogs just seem to like eating dandelions!
Anyways great poem! Surprised it hasn't got any reviews yet!
- MapleWay
Thank you ^^