Hello!!! Here for a review!!!
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The Dandelion flows to and fro
To and fro
First of all, it's repetitive. Although repetition sounds good in many poems, but here it only sounds as repetitive and rebundant. And flows is not at all a good word here. Maybe, here u could use a word like move.
It makes me think of happiness as it flows in the wind
With it's bright yellow flower as it flows in the wind
Again repetitive. Avoid it.
Overall:
It was very good. I really liked it. I loved how you described that simple flower!!! The most stunning part was when you told that it doesn't make u sick!! That's a thing mostly overlooked.
Great read. Keep writing!!
~Forever
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