Young Writers Society

Hi it’s Cozmo here to give you a short and sweet review!

Wow okay I love the little story you made here. Rain during a wedding (I think it’s a wedding)? That usually sucks but you made into such a lovely visual. I can clearly tell that it’s in the perspective of the flower child, and they remind me of myself a little bit (I always have to point out rainbows and I get so excited.) I love the lines “Who holds the color rain soaks in/Shows me difference in kin”
You wrote a lovely poem!
Have a lovely day!
-Cozmo

Hi there again writer! Cupid here, thought I'd fly over a review for you! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today! Let's dive in, shall we?


🔶 Top Graham Cracker First Impression!

Your poem, "Colors" immediately captured my attention with your vivid imagery describing the beauty of a rainy day and the perspective of a small flower child. The prologue of May and the rain-soaked city next to the sea set the scene of the poem, creating a beautiful atmosphere along with your imagery. The use of colors as a central theme is intriguing to me, and the inclusion of the flower child adds a touch innocence and optimism.

🔥 Slightly Burned Marshmallow: Room Improvements!


In your poem, you effectively convey the beauty in the rain and the anticipation of a rainbow, but I think there is a little room for further development in terms of narrative and structure transitions between different ideas and elements could be smoother to enhance the overall flow of poem.

(Also I didn't know if you intentionally spelt "Colors" as "Colours" if so don't mind this part!)

One more thought, providing a bit more context and detail could enhance the reader's understanding and connection to the piece even more! But other then that wonderful job with your writing!!

🍫 Melty Hershey's Chocolate: Highlights the Piece!

What stood out to me the most is your ability to capture the vibrant nature of colors and their impact on our perceptions. The line:

"Who holds the colour rain soaks in
Shows me difference in kin,"

"There's a rainbow right there
And I'm gray so it's fair
Once it goes my colors will return, wait, and see!"