Autism is funny
Because I'm dramatic
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Adhd is funny
Because I'm lazy
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Anxiety is funny
Because I'm too much
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Chronic tics are funny
Because I can't control myself
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Depression is funny
Because I'm sad all the time
Autism is funny
Because I can't seem to understand how to live properly
I don't understand any of it
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Adhd is funny
Because no matter how many times I tell myself to get up,
I can't seem to do it
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Anxiety is funny
Because I never feel safe,
Because I always feel like I'm on display
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Chronic tics are funny
Because I just can't hold them in
And I get started at anyways
~
Depression is funny
Because wdym it's not normal
To want to curl up in a hole and die?
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I have the feeling that my greeting is too cheerful for the subject matter. Sorry @.,@
At first I thought these might be comments people receive for their mental illnesses “oh that’s Jeri she has anxiety, isn’t that funny/isn’t she too much?” But I guess it is more an internal examination, maybe even self-hatred? Like the voice running in your head trying to make everything ridiculous because that is better than being sincere? Or maybe I am interpreting too much (or too little) into this…
I feel like the first part of the poem reflects a more simplistic view, maybe after all the view the other people have. What it looks like from the outside. While the latter part is trying to explain more deeply just how difficult life can be.
But all has this layer of irony, that we can’t seem to shake ☹
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This is a poem I can relate to heavily. As someone who is also autistic, has tics and has experienced anxiety, I am familiar with the frustrations you have presented. You've highlighted a lot of things that people may say about someone with your diagnosis -- lazy, dramatic -- and also the things you experience yourself -- not understanding it, feeling like you're on display, wanting to curl up and die -- and it makes the poem so impactful. It's a great work that highlights real-life issues and tackles the gap between internal neurodivergent struggles nd how the outside world dismisses them.
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The two part structure works like a mirror, and this is a really nice touch. You have set up the superficial, external labels that the public might see about your disorders in the first half and then you crack open your internal anguish in the second half. It gives the piece a powerful emotional impact.
The vernacular vocabularly you use here is a nice touch:
Using text slang like 'wdym' highlights the modern isolation of these conditions, showing how people with these disorders often find solace online, but also perhaps shows a struggle with communication.
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I think this might be a typo, and you meant to say 'stared'
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