So Matt,
Today you are seventeen
And I don’t have a present for you,
But cut me a break okay?
I only knew it was your birthday yesterday,
Which was actually today for me,
But that’s beside the point.
The point is I have nothing for you
Save a few lines that I hope will make you smile.
Matt,
I miss your simple smile.
There was something familiar in your face
And it made me feel at home
Even though we were thousands of miles from it.
Matt,
I miss your awkward charm.
While the rest of the world tries to be more like everyone else,
You are you to a tee
And that makes you special.
Matt,
I miss the way you said my name
And your face would light up when I smiled
And you laughed at all my jokes,
Even when they weren’t funny.
Matt,
I miss the way you hugged me goodbye at the airport,
Your large, sloth arms enveloped me like a warm blanket
And I blinked back tears
And knew we would see each other again someday.
So Matt,
Today on your birthday,
I wish you all the best,
And I hope that when I call out my bedroom window,
My voice will travel across the Southern states,
Through sandstorms and torrential rains,
To find you
In Phoenixish, Arizona
And you’ll smile.
Happy Birthday Matt
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Hello! This is very cute and sweet!
First off, I think you can do without the beginning.
"The point is I have nothing for you
Save a few lines that I hope will make you smile."
Everything from there up, I don't think it's necessary, and it ruins the flow of the piece.
Now. Onto everything after that intro. I love the way you repeated the name "Matt" because it really made the poem personal.
This is so well written, so sad, so happy. It's amazing and If someone wrote this for me I'd be crying. Beautiful piece. Well done.
Keep up the amazing work,
Kam
Hey! Good poem! I like how well-written and thoughtful this is! This was really cute, and made me feel both happy and sad, especially the sixth stanza when you wrote "and I blinked back tears." Just adorable! I didn't really see any mistakes at all, but I like how you wrote "in Phoenixish, Arizona." I can see and feel the real emotions of the friend who wrote this; they proved that they cared about Matt with every single line. This was heartfelt, and a great, smooth read. Thanks for writing this, and have a great day!
Love,
Perks