A Pagan Generation

I like this poem alot. Its very visual, poetic. I feel like it captures the soul of our generation in a way and how we approach culture, love, and sex. Nice job.

I really liked how your poem focused on something real and made people think. It was really deep. Your metaphors and good description are amazing. I loved it.
Your conventions and flow were very good too.

My favorite part:

We learned love on the dance floor
because our dads didn't kiss our mums
before leaving for work.

With a drink for each year,
the lights flash like day and night
and we see more sunsets between beats
than our parents saw in a lifetime.

I first said I love you
with a tongue in my mouth.
Love tastes of salt and cherries,
like kisses from a mother who goes out
perfumed and lipsticked
as if she has someone to impress.

I worship girls who play barefoot
and the grass that grows between
their crimson-painted toes.
Christmas may wrap its presents
with colors meant for the summer solstice,
but we are taking them back.

We are teaching love a lesson.
If you want to play with us,
lose the clothes and learn to
touch before you talk.

I hope to read more of your work!

w&w

Hey there Nightshade, I'm Day and I'm here to review your poem.

First off, I loved it! It's so realistic and typical of teenagers and the younger generation these days. It'd disheartening, actually, but the truth is often bitter. I agree with Angel; this should go in a newspaper or magazine.

There were a few lines I really liked:

I worship girls who play barefoot
and the grass that grows between
their crimson-painted toes.

Christmas may wrap its presents
with colors meant for the summer solstice,
but we are taking them back.

Excellent. This is just how the generations are nowadays. It's explains how everything is, and it's perfect.I highly recommend getting this out in a newspaper, if possible. Perhaps it will give crazy people insight on what they're doing to the world. Maybe it will change.