Anger's Touch

Thanks, guys! I totally missed that when I typed it up.

MelawenWillow--when I said, "The fury burned, as fire made", I meant that his anger burned in the same way that a fire does. In this context, the 'as' means 'like' (as in, similar to. Yeesh--English is a confusing language, isn't it? So many repeating words.).

Ello! This was done wonderfully. I love how you the rhyming was. "Life's a fire blaze with anger such" "High piles cost from anger's touch". Also I saw you made a tiny mistake. I think you meant to put 'his' in stead of 'he' in "He step showed none of inner wrath". But other than that this was done beautifully. I actually got a feel of this. I can tell you are a passionate writer. That's whats best. Keep up the good work.

Hello there!
First of all, let me say awesome job!
I really liked the rhyme scheme you had going on there.
"The fury burned, as fire made;", I did not really understand this line. Did the fire make something? Or was the fury the fire?Maybe you could make the line transition into the next line better?
"He step", I think you meant 'his step'.
Overall, I thought that the message was very good, and it had that kind of enigmatic quality that makes the reader read it again. Good job!