maybe a few and far
in between.
The view’s the same
Just doesn’t have a number
for a name.
Halfway point
Stop to breathe
Most people just stay to leave.
Enjoy the climb
I’ll just wait here.
What goes up must come down.
I’ll see you around.
I like your meaning. It's deep and branches off into other meanings. - I'm assuming that's why people found it somewhat confusing-.
Anyway, all of your technical stuff is good, and I really enjoyed your poem. Very insightful.
My rating:5*s
My favorite part: well, I liked it all of it, so, ya.
Keep writing!
w&w
P.s. What I mean by technical stuff is, spelling, punctuation, grammar, etc.
I didn't really see the point you're trying to make in this poem. Your formatting was good, but I, personally, am not in love with this poem. I won't critique you, since that would be unfair to critique a poem i'm not fond of. Can you please PM me what this poem means? Maybe then I can properly critique it!
Write On,
~~Heidi~~
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