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Hey that was so amazing but what you could do is make the words a bit bigger so that everyone can be able to read it.

I love it MargoSuess! It was funny and down right hilarious to me! I loved the drawings and the doctors looks with the Gothic one. The only critique that I have is that on some parts it was hard to see what the words said, but also as I said, that was the only critique that I had. I really honestly enjoyed this piece of work that you did. Great Job!

~PoeticCowboy

Hah, I love this <3

Hilarious. You can come up with weird and funny things. And what I like more is that you use your experience to come up with these things. Like Terence.
Well, I felt like Terence himself was a ghost, the way you have drown him. And the blood thing was cooleo. I liked it that you used red color, although it was all black and white, for the blood.
And that small cloth covering the genitals..lol. But, I guess that's what needs to be done. Dead bodies should be paid respect, too. And, they have privacy too.
I think, it was Terence's fault for the blood to splatter like this. Still, the girl's gotta do the cleaning, damn it!

Bit of critics..

In the first pic, you cut off Terence's face. Also, the place where the girl is standing. She looks like flat-chested. And, also, her position beside the table didn't seem so well-done to me. Gotta do some editing there. Also, the hanging hand of the dead body- it looks like a stick. And, Terence's hands in the first pic, they need editing too, I think.

In the pic where the girl says- "It's getting everywhere" - I think, the blood splatters need some editing. I can see the blood coming out of the chest/ or whatever part of the body it is. And then I see blood on the back/behind side of the table. Just how much blood is coming out??!!

In the pic where Terence says- "Ah, such beautiful color" - the angle of his stare/looking. Where is he looking?? Is he talking about the blood or the dead body's color?

In the last left pic- the blood spatters look like "red hair of Terence". I think, you gotta edit that one, too.

This is all from me. Hope I could you help you with your drawing. ^-^

Hi, Margo.

Hi, Margo.