Some days, conversation flows so easily
Others, I can't think of a single word to say
Some days, I can't stop smiling because you said "Good morning"
Others, I can't even type out those words myself
Some days, I wait for your every message
Others, I forget you exist as other thoughts crowd my brain
Some days, I send you pictures of my cats from that cute little game I play
Others, I send you memes and you send some back
Some days, you send me the same meme you sent me last week
Others, you send me new ones
Some days, I act like I don't notice that I've seen it before
Others, I... well I only do that, but it's fine
Some days, I talk to you about my dysphoria
Others, you talk to me about yours
Some days, I tell you that I think your sister is secretly bi or poly
Others, you tell me about something homophobic she said
Some days, we don't talk at all
Others, I don't do anything except talk to you
Some days, I simply want to see you
Others, I want to kiss you a million times until I know you're mine
Some days, I forget you have a girlfriend
Others, I wish countless times that you'll break up, but not in a way that would hurt you
Some days, I fall asleep, smiling because you told me to sleep well first
Others, I fall asleep worrying about whether I said something weird or not
Some days, I wake up and see that you texted me after I fell asleep
Others, I see that you haven't responded and you're probably asleep
Some days, I tell you it's okay that you don't have the best sleep schedule
(It's okay, by the way)
Others, you don't say anything about it so I don't get the chance to
Some days, I tell you all about my day and you tell me that you're proud of me
Others, I tell you I'm proud of you, no matter what you do
Some days, I hope you love me too
Others, I know you do
Some days, I look back on when we met and see it as a coincidence
Others, I look back and see it as the best day of my life
Some days, "the day we met" is the day I first saw you
Others, it's the day your sister gave you my number
Some days, I love you
Others, I love you even more
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Hello Logan! I'm Ranger, here to review your wonderful piece of poetry here! So let's go right ahead and get into it!
This was such a wonderful poem to read and so very well balanced. I really like how you conveyed not only the good but also those things that are not always the best. This alone truly adds to the poem in making it deeper and much more meaningful!
In particular, one thing that really stood out to me is how there were clear differences in the beginning like here:
but then they slowly got more and more similar and confident until the very last two lines:
I really love how you included this and it really gave the poem a hopeful and happy ending which I really loved!
The only critiques I have for this poem is a simple grammar tip and one that honestly does add to the poem as well!
The grammar tip would simply be adding periods after each of the "Others" lines. There would be natural pauses here I feel and so periods would be appropriate.
For an example of this, instead of just leaving a line like this:
you could go to the end of the "others" line and put a period like so:
Lastly, I feel like the beginnings are a bit repetitive but honestly, with how consistently you use them, I feel like it does add to it as well and gives a very good structure to the poem!
Overall, I really love how you represented this poem with the dualities and the unique structure you used! I also really love how the concept of the love and romance becomes more and more prevelant near the end! Reading this poem was truly a treat and I hope you keep writing more like it in the future! Hopefully this was helpful and you have a wonderful rest of your day/night!
farewell for now!
-Ranger
Thank you so much!!! Although poetry doesn't always need punctuation, I see what you mean about the periods. I love punctuation! I get how the parts can be repeatitive; I like poetry with repetition and structure, and I love hearing about other peoples' view on these concepts! Have an amazing day/night!
this is a nice poem about how the narrator wants someone and don't know/don't care. and they care about the narrator but their intentions are ambigous, the narrator doesn't know what they think of the narrator? the poem has a clear narrative flow and i like how you express the speakers uncertainty and hopelessness and hopefulness at the same time- which is a very real emotion. i relate to this poem on a deeply personal level.
these are my favourite lines. possibly because this is my exact situation.i think the repetition of "somedays" and "others" make the poem feel a bit repetitive. i understand that it is intentional and like the two sided ness of the situation that you're trying to express but feel like it could be expressed better?
but that's just my opinion. thanks for sharing this poem!
Thank you!!
In my poetry, I like repeating lines because of the consistency with it, but I love to see opinions that vary from mine. I loved hearing your interpretation of this!
Have a wonderful day/night!