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Some Days

by Logan15


Some days, conversation flows so easily

Others, I can't think of a single word to say

Some days, I can't stop smiling because you said "Good morning"

Others, I can't even type out those words myself

Some days, I wait for your every message

Others, I forget you exist as other thoughts crowd my brain

Some days, I send you pictures of my cats from that cute little game I play

Others, I send you memes and you send some back

Some days, you send me the same meme you sent me last week

Others, you send me new ones

Some days, I act like I don't notice that I've seen it before

Others, I... well I only do that, but it's fine

Some days, I talk to you about my dysphoria

Others, you talk to me about yours

Some days, I tell you that I think your sister is secretly bi or poly

Others, you tell me about something homophobic she said

Some days, we don't talk at all

Others, I don't do anything except talk to you

Some days, I simply want to see you

Others, I want to kiss you a million times until I know you're mine

Some days, I forget you have a girlfriend

Others, I wish countless times that you'll break up, but not in a way that would hurt you

Some days, I fall asleep, smiling because you told me to sleep well first

Others, I fall asleep worrying about whether I said something weird or not

Some days, I wake up and see that you texted me after I fell asleep

Others, I see that you haven't responded and you're probably asleep

Some days, I tell you it's okay that you don't have the best sleep schedule

(It's okay, by the way)

Others, you don't say anything about it so I don't get the chance to

Some days, I tell you all about my day and you tell me that you're proud of me

Others, I tell you I'm proud of you, no matter what you do

Some days, I hope you love me too

Others, I know you do

Some days, I look back on when we met and see it as a coincidence

Others, I look back and see it as the best day of my life

Some days, "the day we met" is the day I first saw you

Others, it's the day your sister gave you my number

Some days, I love you

Others, I love you even more


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Fri Nov 08, 2024 8:25 am
anya wrote a review...



this is a nice poem about how the narrator wants someone and don't know/don't care. and they care about the narrator but their intentions are ambigous, the narrator doesn't know what they think of the narrator? the poem has a clear narrative flow and i like how you express the speakers uncertainty and hopelessness and hopefulness at the same time- which is a very real emotion. i relate to this poem on a deeply personal level.

Some days, I fall asleep, smiling because you told me to sleep well first
Others, I fall asleep worrying about whether I said something weird or not
Some days, I wake up and see that you texted me after I fell asleep
Others, I see that you haven't responded and you're probably asleep
these are my favourite lines. possibly because this is my exact situation.
i think the repetition of "somedays" and "others" make the poem feel a bit repetitive. i understand that it is intentional and like the two sided ness of the situation that you're trying to express but feel like it could be expressed better?
but that's just my opinion. thanks for sharing this poem!




Logan15 says...


Thank you!!
In my poetry, I like repeating lines because of the consistency with it, but I love to see opinions that vary from mine. I loved hearing your interpretation of this!
Have a wonderful day/night!




Only the suppressed word is dangerous.
— Ludwig Borne