Hey there!
So starts out biology, then moves onto the word "dang" and music playlists, and ends on time travel. This is very different, and it's kind of hard to follow at some points, so this review will be all over the place. Apologies for that.
Theyāve got chemistry, weāve biology
My heart pumps love
But when Iām cut off, you donāt see the drops
Iām sick and tired of this CNoU filling up my lungs, because Iād Hayd to Suffocate
Could I use some of your air?
Your hair, your derriĆØre, donāt mind me if I stare
And I think mouth to mouth might get me breathing again
If we're getting specific, everyone has chemistry, everyone has biology, but yea, I get the general gist of that. I don't understand the 'drops" bit though, as it could mean a lot of things, but I have no idea which one it is supposed to represent.
I feel like there should be more before you bring up Hayd, as I doubt anyone knows that it is a reference to a singer, especially with all of the science phrases beforehand. I also don't think that word is a verb, so maybe switch that to something else.
I could also argue about the 'derriĆØre' but I don't think my French is good enough for all that, and I'd end up embarrassing myself.
We could see Siam, that makes us Siamese, connected by the veins
Siam is now Thailand, and it has been for a while. I say that as a person who's mother is from Thailand, so I believe I am correct there. Siamese describes cats and using it for a person is somewhat debatable.
Sorry for any spelling errors, I wrote this really quick.
Best,
Max
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