Two Poems: Everything Spins and Write, Wrought

Hello. ForeverYoung here for a review.

First one first
I really liked the rhythm scheme of the first poem.

Inside and out

With reason and doubt

The use of opposites are actually good along with showing a deep meaning.
The first line shows that you spin both internally and externally.

All of it I must do, and now

This line is a bit unclear. Please explain it to me.

Second one
This one is really good. I have no suggestions or complaints. Well done with this one.

Bye!!!!

I liked the format of these two poems and your rhyming is very keen and corresponding with each line:

Pages, made through sifting ages

this line really brought together the word pages with ages and the way it's done ties the meaning up in a very effective way. I also just loved this line because of the words that you have chosen- there's such imagery in there.

Your first poem was really flowful and I liked the repetition that you have used. It implies a sense of absurdity and chaos and the need to grab hold of this object that is spinning out of control that you are unable to obtain. The line

With reason and doubt

proves this point since it shows opposite feelings and the harsh reality that completely defies the physics of life.

All of it I must do, and now

However, with this line, I felt as if 'do' was slightly vague. Could you replace this word with one that explains your meaning and mission with more explanation? Since the poem itself is done in a simple style, in my opinion, adding more emphasis and detail to the last line would create a bigger impact.

With the second poem, I loved it. The way that you have added a word at the front and then described it after has a very metaphorical and direct stance to it. It suggests that the world is dismembered and all you can pick up are these words that hold these meanings. It highlights how these words are important to the narrator and how they outline the narrator's life, in some sense.

Letters, taken from the better and better

With this line, could better and better be replaced? I felt as if doesn't suit the structure quite as much as the other lines.

One of the lines that I liked in the second poem was

Write, wrought out of endless somethings

because it gave the feeling of wringing emotion and stories from day-to-day life, scouring the mind for tales to tell. I think that this is a very relatable line that represents the writer's mind.

Awesome job on these poems and keep writing!