Oh, wow, that was great!
I loved the twist at the end! I was expecting some heartbreaking, crying out, fearful, poem about a false god, or something, but no... This was awesome!
There was one tiny thing I feel I should point out, and that's that in nearly every line, you have a rhyme, except for, "one be caught in the eye, of a horrid god, colossal to describe" No rhyme. I don't know, maybe that's just me.
Amazing poem! Instant like! And welcome to YWS, I think you'll like it here!
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