so soft
so sweet
she touched all of our hearts, and Tanukichi's balls
passion and strength flowed from her being, almost as much as her love nectar
all the friends made along the way
all the tears, the laughs, the rape
the candle burned out long before the legend over did.
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Hey, yo, Lettersnumbersonly! Stranger here on this wonderful day and I have a review for you!
Alright, short poem, so this isn't going to be a grand review.
Long story short, this was a waste of 200 points. You have to admit it. There is nothing humorous about it to me, and there is absolutely no meat to it. You're just spewing nonsense that may seem witty but it's just random. I don't find anything redeemable. To make this a better work, add meat to it. Expand the work greatly, make it a loosely stringed together jamboree of nonsense. That would be enjoyable to me. I did enjoy the A-hole and B-hole thing, though. I'll give you that.
Yeah, not the biggest review, but there wasn't that much to review.
Keep writing, and stay groovy!
Was It supposed to be anything? No
Good for you? Don't post a work if it's not for criticism
Dude, relax! If she/he/they want to write something that makes absolutely no scrubbing sense, let them.
Cello here!
Cute- thing? It's not a poem or a story so I don't know how to refer to it. 'Cute work' There we are. The procrastination came across loud and clear.
It's nice to stick to the first version, keep the writing true to it's meaning of 'I wrote this when I should have been being productive' but I still have a few suggestions (Either for editing this one or if you plan on making something similar)
Question more- You focused on two topics. If you want to seem off task, keep going and see how much you can ask.
Make things clear- The first question was honestly a tad confusing. If you're wasting time, at least waste some time working with wording.
Get into more pointless topics- Honestly? Your questions were pretty interesting. When people are trying to get out of work they tend to get desperate. Show that. 'How do I know that the furniture doesn't move around the house when I'm sleeping?'
Over do it- Again, you're wasting time. Be talkative. 'here's my question. Here's a possible answer that can't be true because-"
Short review for a short work.
Keep up the writing!
-ChocolateCello
Oh... that is... Interesting. I can't answer any of those questions. They're very odd. They're very random. They're very... Not answerable