Hi! Space here for a review.
Let's start with why I clicked on it. The concept of masks is something that I generally mention when writing about things like sadness and depression, I find it a great metaphor when you try to hide your true feelings in order to either push others away or make yourself happy. There is a big difference between a smile on a mask and a true smile.
It is a very heart-felt poem, with a very sad topic that is unfortunately referenced in a lot poems and stories because these kinds of things affect a lot of people. I personally know how this feels, and I can say you conveyed it in a very realistic way that people like me can relate to.
I kind of expected the topic, or whatever I was going to read, so maybe make it deeper, with a few added things like twists, examples and explaining why you/the protagonist feels like this. Maybe make the rhymes a bit more even so it rolls off the tongue easily.
Other then those few recommendations, I found this to be a very nice poem, with a deep meaning that touched my heart and possibly others because of the somewhat dark meaning that you could clearly see through the way you described it.
Great job!
-Space the Snickerdoodle
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