Hey there, Keshavthakuri !!
This is Eros here with a review for this beautiful piece of poetry of yours !!
Let us begin the review with the title. I must say that the title of this poem was very catchy and attractive and i was at onvce attracted to read it and find out what is there in the poem...
Then the rtitle is also very apt and appropriate and it is related with the poem. "My Lady" suits the poem very well.
The next thing comes the flow of the poem. The flow of the poem is very smooth and I can't see any line in here that sounds or looks or reads a bit odd or out of the poem. So the flow of the poem is smooth. Also, I like the flow of ideas ... that is, the way the thoughts, ideas and very importantly the feelings are flowimg is very beautiful. The stanzas are linkefd to each other with fine threads of ideas. The feelings that you put in the poem is simply awesome.
It describes the feelings of a person who is in love with a beautiful lady, but the lady doesnt see him as a lover. She takes him, perhaps, just for granted... as a person who will always be there in her hardships of ...say breakup or such things.
there is romance and a deep pain hiddden in nthe poem. The words that you have used suits the poem very well.
My favorite part in the whole poem, was, the stanza,
She needs me when she's Lonley ,
When her pretty boys have left,
And after the party is over ,
My existence becomes her hiding place .
It describes the beauty of the lady extremely wonderfully, by adding a tender touch of love.
The poem is great, but i would still suggest a little thing, which is would enhance the presentation of the poem and make it easier for the readers to read... The suggestion is to remove the unwanted spaces...
Like,
She mesmerizes my soul into her slave,
And turns me to a king.
Crates of confusion wrapped into a present,
She sets my greed in fire.
A puppet without strings lingering into her world,
I dance without questions.
She is a disease without a cure,
it burns me blind.
A character intensely built on my expectation,
clings on to my thoughtless desires.
She gets lost in the mist made of people,
Far behind the unseen relationships.
My assumptions are the only clue of what she does.
Rest, I love this piece of awesome poetry from heart... and it deserves a like from me...
Keep writing such awesome poetries and other stuff and we would love to keep reading them and reviewing them !!
Have a great day/ night !!
With love,
From Eros.

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