Why are Tears So Beautiful?

Hey, yo, Kelpies! Strange here on this fantastic Review Day and I have a review for you!

Okay, so this review has a very special place in my heart. This is my 350th review, so after this there's going to be a fresh blue star under my name. That being said, this was a neat poem. I didn't read the other reviews, so I grabbed a few criticisms. That's going to make my review shorter than I want. Oh, well. Let's jump into it, shall we?

I enjoyed how this brought a good message about tears. Usually, poetry represents tears as a sign of weakness. This makes it out as tears are good. I liked that fact, but I've seen quite a few poems do this before. It touched upon the simple things they all talk about. For example, that diamonds comparison didn't bring anything new.

Another criticism is how at one point, you capitalized every time you hit enter, then it switched where you didn't. I don't see the artistic technique in that, and possibly you forgot when you first did it. It hurts my eyes a bit, and it makes it look less professional.

As a final thought, this was an okay poem. One thing I wasn't fond of was how you talked about beauty in the end, because that was mighty predictable. It left the poem off with a tame needing that just didn't hit my heartstrings. It didn't have the strongest ending, which dampens the poem quite a bit. It wasn't a bad poem, but it could be better since it has quite a bit of potential.

Good job, keep writing, and stay groovy!

Wow... I've always thought of tears/crying as a weakness. Thank you for showing it I another light. May you be blessed, Kelpies.

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Dear Kelpies,

EccentricRose is here to review your work! =)

The title was very attracting, especially to us other poetry writer's who sort of feed off each others' emotions and thoughts.

I liked the first half the best but I agree with Solvy that it needs a little bit more forming of the idea.

My favorite line was, "Like mist in an eyelash." The other lines were also very descriptive but I found this one really unique.

Thank you for sharing this with us. It has a beautiful meaning that needs to be recognized by a lot of people. *raises hand guiltily* I tend to bottle up my tears ,as I know many others do too. =p

Good luck!

~Rose

Hi Kelpies! My name is Solvy and I'm here to review for you.

I don't think you're a bad poet at all. In fact, I can read this out loud, and judging by the flow, I can conclude it's lovely. However, I feel there's a hole in this poem when it comes to the content. But I find the subject to be quite peculiar, for which reason I believe this poem has potential. I believe you need to develop further, as your point doesn't seem to explain why your narrator believes what they belives, as in, it doesn't convince the reader. Think about of answering why tears are made to shine? Why is crying good or healthy? Perhaps you could talk about the act of crying in relation to society. How does society discourage crying in a way? How is it wrong to bottle up emotions in certain moments? I just think it leaves the reader wondering too many things, and I believe your piece could really improve by developing the idea.

-Solvy

Last line. Spelling error: Precious.
But I really liked your poem. It was simple, but yet beautiful. 7th line, you could add a period at the end. Just a suggestion, you don't have to follow it. It's your poem anyway.