A guest steps in, into this world called 'Earth.'
As fate sets him, with fangs of 'mirth.'
The earth becomes, his royal guardian.
As nature assists, his loyal custodian.
He spreads his wings,
Wings of glory.
Fighting with destiny,
Like a never-ending story.
He is hurled away,
As he is down and weary.
But he strides asway.
With conscious, dreary.
His enemy chides:
"Oh, angel of light!
What have you done?
To my friend, alas!"
As he clasps his hands,
Flaming with might.
Drawing closer,
To his foe insight.
He sighs away,
With his smile astray.
As fate reveals,
The only way.
The fire burns,
As he throws away.
All his hopes,
Which fetter astray.
But at last he finds,
The one and only.
Who stands aside,
Woe and lonely.
And all ends well,
As flowers adorn.
Bearing the swords of might,
With what he sworn.
His smile returns,
As he bids farewell.
To the world of adventures,
In which he dwelled.
As the guest departs,
Another arrives.
With wings of glory,
Begins another story.
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This is a nice poem; it has this "epic" feeling to it that you convey strongly through your powerful choice of words. Beneath it is a powerful message that puts an emotional, drastic tale behind every single mundane life that I appreciate.
The apostrophes around Earth and Mirth aren't necessary.
This is probably my favorite line; it sets that tone that I already mentioned, it really goes a long way with giving your poem this epic, enchanting feeling that I appreciate. And the way it tells of life as never ending, I really admire.
The tale of struggle, then a new life begins is very good. I also like how you interpret us as guests to Earth, just mere visitors coming and going; it makes a whole lot of sense, connecting it to what you describe as a never ending story of people coming and going into this world.
Overall was a really good poem, I enjoyed reading it.
amazing it makes you wonder what happened who is the demon who is the angel why do they fight. you once again did great work making it flow with the words. you draw in the reader quickly before they get away and lose interest. im read such interesting descriptions making me wonder who they why their there. what is the full story. and the end it made me so happy I guess I cant think of a better word, "with wings of glory, starts another story." perfect you bring it to a epic close with seven words. good job please continue writing these.