Hahahaha, very interesting poem you have written my friend. sorry i laughed, but i find it funny for a bird with no wings. the tittle is very interesting and catchy. one thing i love about this poem is that, its very short and exquisite. i love it.
but there is something i think i should help you check out here. the statement "If only I could be born aloft" i think the 'born' should be replaced with "borne" this is because if i'm correct born is a verb which in most cases refers to giving birth, while borne means to lift or to carry.
please check this well before adopting anything.
never stop writing my friend. keep this up....
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