I wonder what’s in your mind;
Are you screaming?
Does your throat hurt?
Are you crying?
Do you tears fade?
Are you laughing?
Does your voice crack?
Are you thinking?
Do your thoughts fade?
Please tell me your thoughts;
Every day I read your words
the soft sorrows
and screaming bliss
and I wonder if he gave you a kiss
I hope you know;
I am here
it’s not for a show
and you my dear
are an image made from heaven
and so I wonder what’s in your mind;
Please
tell me dear. . .
And I’ll hold you
I’ll comfort you
it’s not for a show
I wonder what’s in your mind;
and maybe
I’ll tell you mine.
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@moon1 what do you think???
i love how this feels like someone genuinely reaching out to another person and wanting to understand them, not just their words but everything they keep hidden behind them. the repeated “i wonder what’s in your mind” is so soft but also kinda heartbreaking, especially when it feels like the writer is asking someone to let them in because they genuinely care. and the “it’s not for a show” part makes it feel even more sincere, like they want the person to know that their care isn’t fake or just for attention. i also really love how it ends with “and maybe i’ll tell you mine” because it makes the whole thing feel mutual, like they wanna understand this person but maybe they’re hoping to be understood too. it’s genuinely such a sweet poem and i think the way it expresses care is really beautiful. i hope you are okay, and i hope yk they deserve the same comfort and understanding they want to give other people. 💗
oh my goodness, Renwritessss that you SOOOOOO muchhhhH!!!!!!!
I'm so glad that you liked this poem. 🥹
ehe yes i LOVE itttt i hope u keep writing 👍👍