mmm...if this poem doesn't make sense, read Revelation by faith.
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Of course when I first read this poem I was all, "What's he talking about? I'm confused." So then I scampered off to read Faith's poem and it makes a much... maybe a little (who knows) more sense now. So, anyway, it was an awesome poem, but it was really much, much better when I read Faith's poem afterwords (and then re-read yours). Made more sense and all that. Good going, very good, mucho kudos and all that. Brilliant.
and who's the bitch now? *grin* this may require a response of its own...i'll think about that.
Well, it made sense to me because I read that one...or so I think I did. Agh, I've got such bad memory.
Anyway, this was my favorite part:
My wingless bones do not sleep
they ache and the redolent freedom
that escape from their silenced grave
reminds me not of what’s been done
a thousand times before, but
that tomorrow the sun will warm my blood
and scab over a larger part of my
existence, and not so much that I will be
scraped away, but I will be a god among
fleshy men.
Well, I guess that's a lot of a "favorite part" but I couldn't find anywhere to cut it short..so um...over all really good Brad but I liked that part the best.