Don't know how to properly review this, but I'm sure gonna try! (Disclaimer: I don't know how to do the quote thingy yet)
I think the points in this are so valid, it's crazy. Definitely makes me wonder what the world would be if we used baked treats instead of glares or aggression. In this short, presumably humorous paragraph or two you've managed to make me rethink how the world works and I applaud you for that. It's also worth mentioning how this has a darker undertone to it, one that I can't quite place my finger on. But one that nonetheless makes it that much more fun to read.
"Something sweet to sooth the ache of watching you walk away" was probably one of the most poetic parts in my opinion, and it made me stop to think about life for a second. Every word you've written can be taken into so much consideration and have so many ways to be interpreted (An English teachers dream, honestly)
Anyways, 10/10, amazing work! (PS. sorry about the two comments)
Points: 91
Reviews: 11
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