Hey there! Woah. Yep, this is just plain amazing. You spend a good amount of time building up the 'facts' about what the crystal mask can mean, but you keep it simple to keep the fast pace up without making it too dull. Your last few lines though are AMAZING. You put forward a very strong and real reasoning. I feel that poetry should be used to share a message or emotions that the reader can learn from or connect to. The last bit gives us the message, but you use the earlier bits to gain that connection and even share a bit more emotion about wishes of who we all wish to be. Have I complimented this enough yet? No, not at all. Have I started to ramble and get annoying? Probably. But I LOVED this.
Anyway, time for me to stop fangirling and move on. I hope my review (more like infinite praise) is helpful to you in your writing endeavors.
Sláinte -Junel (PFF)
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