I love this poem! I liked how you used such vivid imagery and metaphor to describe such a difficult and complex feeling. I could really picture what you were describing. I particularly enjoyed "her heart struggled against it's [sic] hard-bound leash," and "holding onto her faint words like a lost lover." I think the last line would be stronger if you deleted "and forever..." but obviously as the writer it's your call. Hope to read more of your work!
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