Young Writers Society

This poem is worded so strongly that I literally feel like I'm the one who's suffering at the hands of the universe rather than the narrator themselves.

Right off the bat I liked the poem because of how you set it up -- it reads like a letter directed at the universe, which is a very good way of capturing the reader's attention (alongside the title, of course).

My favorite line is this:

"Yet you've binge-watched my misery like a sit-com through the years."

This line on its own gives a modern twist to the ages-old concept of the universe mocking us in our darkest moments.

The mixed feelings of hopelessness and frustration are what really make this poem effective to me; rather than being angry and only angry at the universe, the speaker is resigning themselves to the fact that they will never be able to "exit the stage" of suffering until the universe says it's time.

In terms of suggestions, I don't really have any big ones; the only real grammatical issue I found was that you said "hold on to" instead of "hold onto", and the word "epitaph" feels a bit out of place but aside from that I loved this piece.

Write on!!

This is a very deep poem. You did really well to get your emotions across. I could feel them.

Hey there @GirlWithATypewriter. I went through your poem and I loved it . I can very well relate to every emotion and pain that you have conveyed here .

You have used some very strong words to express your anger towards the injustice in your life. The way you have despised the universe for treating you like an object of scorn is remarkable , especially the line:
"Yet you've binge-watched my misery like a sit-com through years." gives the best description to what actually happens with most of us.

There was fluency and consistency in your entire poem and you even maintained the rhyme scheme throughout.
Great job!
May God help you in your hard times and bless you with happiness.

**My Thoughts**

Hey there! LZ here with a review! I really like this poem. It flows well and it was very easy to read. The subject was also awesome.

**Formatting and Grammar**

As for formatting, it is very clean and neat. I like how the lines get bigger and bigger, than go back to small.

As for grammar, this was fine too! Your a really good writer.

**Punctuation and Capitalization**

For punctuation, this piece was perfect!

For capitalization, it was perfect, too! I liked how you capitalized the beginning of every line. It looks very clean. Maybe you should capitalize universe. It just seems like something you would capitalize.

**Other**

This subject was amazing. I really like this line the best:

Yet you’ve binge-watched my misery like a sit-com through the years.

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Do you write book other than poems? Again no offense and again just curious.

Hey there GrilWithATypewriter! I am here to ask. Are you expressing your own opinion or is this just an idea? Just curious, no offense.
I love your poem. Many different sentences all mix together as one, like a salad.
Thank you for writing this, I also feel about the world this way sometimes.